Broken Pieces of GLASS!!

Every heart from inside is itself like a broken glass..

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

BROKEN PIECES OF GLASS….

 

 

 

I just don’t wanna feel…

Like a broken piece of glass…

…

…

[It all started with the last summer vacation…

When my eyes met yours...

And waited for your reaction….

I just laid awake for days and nights…

I tried to express the feelings of my heart…

Which I got after living in your eyes…

But time went so fast…..

And snatched you from my life…without any last…

I found that you’re gone….

I won’t say that I felt like a stone….

Coz I felt like a broken piece of glass…

Like a broken piece of glass

And when I came home….

I found a broken piece of glass…

Lying silently on my floor….

I got my reflection back from it….

But it’s a broken Conscience of mine…

And I felt scattered…

I found that you’re gone…

I won’t say that I felt like a stone….

Coz I felt like a broken piece of glass

Like a broken piece of glass…]

 

 

 

 

Broken pieces of glass..!!!

Broken pieces of glass..!

Broken pieces of glass..!!!

Oh!! They are so easy to find…

As Every heart from inside…..

Is a broken bundle of lies…

Just like that of mine….

And that’s why I don’t wanna feel….

Like a broken piece of glass…

As I once did….

 

 

 

Broken pieces of glass!!!!

Oh! They are so easy to find…

As Every heart from inside…..

Is a bundle of broken lies…

Just like that of mine….

 

 

 

 

Broken pieces of glass have deep sharp edges…

Which they got after being rubbed with my heart’s ashes…

Broken pieces of glass are the best examples of hypocrisy….

As they reflect your real face without the feeling of your love’s immortality….

Broken pieces of glass are searching for their identity….

As each and every broken piece having its own integrity…

Broken pieces of glass have deep sharp edges…

Which they got after being rubbed with my heart’s ashes…

 

 

 

 

Broken pieces of glass!!!!

Oh! They are so easy to find…

As Every heart from inside…..

Is a bundle of broken lies…

Just like that of mine….

And that’s why I don’t wanna feel….

Like a broken piece of glass…

As I once did….

 

 

 

 

Broken pieces of glass are trying to enchant the story of my life…

With each and every broken piece showing different reasons for tears of mine….

Broken pieces of glass are wishing for someone to pick them up….

Just to vanish their thirst of some pure red blood…..

Broken pieces of glass have deep sharp edges…

Which they got after being rubbed with my heart’s ashes…

 

 

 

 

I just no longer wanna see these broken pieces of glass…

I turned myself…

But then I found that my heart itself…

Is a broken piece of glass….

My heart itself is a broken piece of glass..!!!

Broken pieces of glass!!!!

Oh! They are so easy to find…

As Every heart from inside…..

Is a bundle of broken lies…

Just like that of mine….

Just like that of mine…..

:)

 

 

 

Reviews

[Raef C. Boylan]

This is an interesting piece.
Is that box deliberately hiding some of the words behind it? That's like teasing the reader! :-)


I prefer what's outside the box, as the stilted rhyme -

"I found that you're gone�.
I won't say that I felt like a stone�.
Coz I felt like a broken piece of glass�" - within the box didn't appeal to me much.


"Broken pieces of glass are trying to enchant the story of my life�" - an intriguing line...

Are these song lyrics, or is it a poem? The way that you've chosen to rhyme the lines, and the repetition of concepts, makes it seem like a song to me, but i'm not sure.
I think you've done a good job of trying to explore this idea thoroughly in a personal way.

"As Every heart from inside�..
Is a bundle of broken lies�" - quite a sad way to end it, and the echo makes the line linger.

Overall, not a bad write.
Thanks for posting it.

[Shelby]

Very different, but I like it. I agree with the other review about liking the words outside the box bwetter. I notticed that you said "I just lied awake...." something there doesn't seem right to me. it could be because its the wrong use of the word. laid might fit better but this is a very unique peice and I like it

[Daisy]

A great idea to break parts up into broken glass like you have done. This hits me as lyrical, repetitions of broken adding impact to the words. Clever but I felt sad at then end. I'm sure not every heart has to be broken.
x

[poddar kushal]

nice poem a well versed gush of emotion.some times i wonder the scream, as you have exalted should be spontanious. that is without reviewing own lines. i have tried it.found the result can flactuate. what do you think about your own piece? Was it spontanious?
is there any significance on the use of colors?

[Tyler King]

glass is actually one of the missed elements in a poem when it comes to personal stability and hope. A lot of people pass right over it but you totally nailed it. I have a similar poem that I'll probably put up when ever i find it from my piles of crap. It shares a lot of what your glass symbolizes. I don't think i could have hit the mark quite as well though, keep it up!

[FicWriter]

This is a very interesting poem. A broken piece of glass is a unique object to compare one's heartbreak to. It gives the poem a fresh feel. You also arrange the words so that the overall effect of loss and pain are conveyed most effectively. You repeat certain lines and passages to make particular feelings linger. It's overall a really neat and powerful way of writing.
Although I don't usually read poetry, you've gotten me interested in your work. It's very neat when you can write poetry well, and it improves your skill of choice of words and arrangement of words to create a single, particular effect. I'll keep reviewing your work.
Keep writing, this is really good stuff!

[DarkAngelWriter]

Is this a song? It reads very well. I saw that you reviewed some of my boyfriend's work, so I figured I'd review some of yours! This is a very good piece. Great write =)

[munch]

hmmm
broken piece of glass
never thought of it in such a way
i must se things in different aspects
u r awsum yaar