Broken Pieces of GLASS!!

Every heart from inside is itself like a broken glass..

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

BROKEN PIECES OF GLASS….

 

 

 

I just don’t wanna feel…

Like a broken piece of glass…

…

…

[It all started with the last summer vacation…

When my eyes met yours...

And waited for your reaction….

I just laid awake for days and nights…

I tried to express the feelings of my heart…

Which I got after living in your eyes…

But time went so fast…..

And snatched you from my life…without any last…

I found that you’re gone….

I won’t say that I felt like a stone….

Coz I felt like a broken piece of glass…

Like a broken piece of glass

And when I came home….

I found a broken piece of glass…

Lying silently on my floor….

I got my reflection back from it….

But it’s a broken Conscience of mine…

And I felt scattered…

I found that you’re gone…

I won’t say that I felt like a stone….

Coz I felt like a broken piece of glass

Like a broken piece of glass…]

 

 

 

 

Broken pieces of glass..!!!

Broken pieces of glass..!

Broken pieces of glass..!!!

Oh!! They are so easy to find…

As Every heart from inside…..

Is a broken bundle of lies…

Just like that of mine….

And that’s why I don’t wanna feel….

Like a broken piece of glass…

As I once did….

 

 

 

Broken pieces of glass!!!!

Oh! They are so easy to find…

As Every heart from inside…..

Is a bundle of broken lies…

Just like that of mine….

 

 

 

 

Broken pieces of glass have deep sharp edges…

Which they got after being rubbed with my heart’s ashes…

Broken pieces of glass are the best examples of hypocrisy….

As they reflect your real face without the feeling of your love’s immortality….

Broken pieces of glass are searching for their identity….

As each and every broken piece having its own integrity…

Broken pieces of glass have deep sharp edges…

Which they got after being rubbed with my heart’s ashes…

 

 

 

 

Broken pieces of glass!!!!

Oh! They are so easy to find…

As Every heart from inside…..

Is a bundle of broken lies…

Just like that of mine….

And that’s why I don’t wanna feel….

Like a broken piece of glass…

As I once did….

 

 

 

 

Broken pieces of glass are trying to enchant the story of my life…

With each and every broken piece showing different reasons for tears of mine….

Broken pieces of glass are wishing for someone to pick them up….

Just to vanish their thirst of some pure red blood…..

Broken pieces of glass have deep sharp edges…

Which they got after being rubbed with my heart’s ashes…

 

 

 

 

I just no longer wanna see these broken pieces of glass…

I turned myself…

But then I found that my heart itself…

Is a broken piece of glass….

My heart itself is a broken piece of glass..!!!

Broken pieces of glass!!!!

Oh! They are so easy to find…

As Every heart from inside…..

Is a bundle of broken lies…

Just like that of mine….

Just like that of mine…..

:)

 

 

 

Reviews

[Raef C. Boylan]

This is an interesting piece.
Is that box deliberately hiding some of the words behind it? That's like teasing the reader! :-)


I prefer what's outside the box, as the stilted rhyme -

"I found that you're gone�.
I won't say that I felt like a stone�.
Coz I felt like a broken piece of glass�" - within the box didn't appeal to me much.


"Broken pieces of glass are trying to enchant the story of my life�" - an intriguing line...

Are these song lyrics, or is it a poem? The way that you've chosen to rhyme the lines, and the repetition of concepts, makes it seem like a song to me, but i'm not sure.
I think you've done a good job of trying to explore this idea thoroughly in a personal way.

"As Every heart from inside�..
Is a bundle of broken lies�" - quite a sad way to end it, and the echo makes the line linger.

Overall, not a bad write.
Thanks for posting it.

[Vaishali..^_^]

wow..!!it was really so amazing...!..!!

[Karl]

Oh wow! what an amazing piece of writing.

[Together]

I liked the repetition in it a lot, it is creating a very nice effect!

[Ruby Moon]

mmm....somehow it seems to be more of a chant, a lyric because of the repeating lines
^-^
but that is your style in a way...the echoing of words
kind of like how when glass breaks it makes that sound when it falls to the ground
(ok...they actually dont make any sound that we can differenciate[happens too fast] but i like to think we can hear each individual piece)

"Broken pieces of glass are trying to enchant the story of my life�
With each and every broken piece showing different reasons for tears of mine�.
Broken pieces of glass are wishing for someone to pick them up�.
Just to vanish their thirst of some pure red blood�..
Broken pieces of glass have deep sharp edges�
Which they got after being rubbed with my heart's ashes�"
i like ths stanza the most
^-^

[Roxy]

Damn! Awesome write

[Golden]

A broken piece of glass is a unique object to compare one's heartbreak to. It gives the poem a fresh feel. You also arrange the words so that the overall effect of loss and pain are conveyed most effectively. The repetition of few lines made the piece linger and lyrical.
Amazing write.

[Blue Rose]

Broken pieces of glass!!!!

Oh! They are so easy to find�

As Every heart from inside�..

Is a bundle of broken lies�

Just like that of mine�.

And that's why I don't wanna feel�.

Like a broken piece of glass�

As I once did�.



Beautiful..beautiful...and beautiful
A great write!

[Blackbeats]

Broken pieces of glass..!!!

Oh!! They are so easy to find�

As Every heart from inside�..

Is a broken bundle of lies�

Just like that of mine�.

I liked the way you repeated these lines it somehow made the entire piece linger and lyrical too.
Nice!

[Innocent]

Even I loved the second part a lot as it's much of like a song lyric.
Really a nice one and loved the way you used symbolism.
Great!

[CarrieLynn {Chameleon A..]

the imagery in this is powerful and the words are lyrical...interesting and wonderful piece! Great Job! :)