My world

My World

 

There used to be a place in my heart that you fit perfectly in,

It almost seemed as if it was meant for you.

Slowly that place dwindled.

I started to see your face less in my dreams.

Could this really be happening?

Could I be losing you after all this time?

I didn’t want it to be true,

but clearly the answer was yes.

You were leaving me, without a glance back.

You started to fade away faster.

Then when I talked to you, it seemed like I didn’t even know you, you didn’t know me.

I tried to recover, by finding someone new.

I thought it had worked; stupid illusion.

We continued to talk, getting to know the new us.

Then, though my heart couldn’t bare it, it was gone.

Gone forever, without a chance to return.

Never thought it would feel like this,

Hurt this much, considering I didn’t know the new you to well.

I found out that was the problem.

I was stuck to my world revolving around you.

My every dream with you, are nightmares.

I know what person I loved,

It was you all along.

Reviews

[raining]

We have/are all going through this. It is the unique charactor of love that its antithesis is loss. Even us elderly types (at 56) have quandries and wish to be held again. Too bad it says (and no-one has identified what the "it" is) but when someone tears your guts out, and leaves you screaming (or just brooding) in pain....well there is no justice is there....? None. so finally the embers will die given the forgetting balm of time.

So, this poem rendered that pain like a snapshot.... and so I liked it. good for you, keep on writing....raining

[Alex]

Really like it Sarah, your really talented and your work is really amazing. :)

[Ashlyn]

While the poem doesn't depict the exact situation as the one I'm in, I really felt something while reading this. I understand so much of this. It almost made me want to cry.
I love how much emotion is put into this poem.

The only thing that I have to comment on otherwise, is that this kind of feeling is written about so much. It's not bad that you wrote about it, but if you could find a way to make this poem outshine the others. Do something really creative with it.

[Meradee]

To me this says that we have to lose what we really love and start to try to love something else to really understand what we really wanted in the first place. I really like this poem it's going in my favorites. Thank you for writing something so wonderful.
Pepper...