Bring me home

Bring me home

A Poem by Beyond Our Control

Sometimes it just hurts too bad to bear,

I just want it to end,

Please just help me end it..

Just take me away,

Let me have no final words,

Just bring me up to you already please..

I don't want this pain anymore,

This unbearable pain,

I hate it..

And me..

Just bring me home already..

Please bring me home...

© 2015 Beyond Our Control


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Beyond Our Control
Again.. feedback :)

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My feedback is that this in no way reflects your profile, thank HP for that. A detrimentally depressing piece, I would say that you likely should force yourself to write something a bit more upbeat just to see if you can. Also, your tag says "suiside" its "Suicide" haha.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beyond Our Control

9 Years Ago

Haha.. thanks for the review Chase! I will take into consideration writing something upbeat. That's .. read more



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Depressing in one sense however its a good expression of deep feelings in writing. A release needs perhaps or maybe just penning a thought. Either way I found this to be a good write. Thanks for sharing.

~Rob~

Posted 9 Years Ago


that was really amazing, u were able to talk about something that many people go through like suicide, sometimes ppl have a hard time in life and think it is the end :( those are the same ppl, who have been bullied by other ppl and believe everything that they are told by them :( amazing job :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Beyond Our Control

9 Years Ago

mhm :) they do
Justin

9 Years Ago

yup :) if u have time, would you please check out some of my writing :) thanks :)
Beyond Our Control

9 Years Ago

sure :) i'd love to
My feedback is that this in no way reflects your profile, thank HP for that. A detrimentally depressing piece, I would say that you likely should force yourself to write something a bit more upbeat just to see if you can. Also, your tag says "suiside" its "Suicide" haha.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beyond Our Control

9 Years Ago

Haha.. thanks for the review Chase! I will take into consideration writing something upbeat. That's .. read more
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Added on October 14, 2015
Last Updated on October 19, 2015
Tags: sadness, suicide

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Alto, TX



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