You

You 

with your humdrum 

black tongue

You

with your poison lips

and fatal nips

You

with your lies

and your lies

your clever guise

Me

with my naive view

and belief in you

You were never more

than I made you

but I built a belief so strong

and so tall

only the biggest lies

would make it tumble down

Oh you,

you

with your eloquent discourse

and lack of remorse

for any havoc you may cause

You left a mess of me

and suddenly

I stumble over rhymes

trying to make sense of the crimes

you bestowed upon me

Me

with my whys

and my whys

and my dwindling ties

to what is left of sanity

I took you at face value

how was I to argue

when hope overgrew knowledge

You make me weak in the knees

your lies make me sneeze

I am nothing if not able

though I bought into your fable

I may be naive

but don't misconceive

I left you thinking you had won

But as I lay here on this floor

I am quick to restore

that you don't count for anything

Your words may help you now

but soon it will be found

you are nothing profound

in fact, I think you are abject

With my feet on the ground

and thoughts now unbound

I am everything

without you

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I think that the dialogue which you are created here is simply mesmerising, I enjoyed every word, you seem to have written this lyrical prose in a very commercial way ( this a true compliment by the way) , I read it a few times and love it, would sound great with music too, wonderful.

[Jessica Gillitzer]

Wow this is so awesome! This has a very sharp tongue, you self define ever so gracefully while taking apart the problems in it all. This is a very powerful read, Keep this beauty flowing.
< 3 Jessie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the strength at the end..."i am everything, without you"

he thought he controlled, but not quite...hope often does outgrow knowledge...

we often learn too late...sounds like this speaker learned soon enough to move on without too much damage...

but there will always be that caution.

damn i wish sometimes we could just go back to innocence...before that first "hurt" makes us start to grow up.

jacob

[Jupiter]

I completely agree with you, Jacob. I miss those times. But as they say, you can't have the good without the bad, right?

Jupiter