One Word Short

This is about my love telling me how he missed his ex.

I can't shake the whispers lingering in my ears

the soft tones of misunderstandings 

a few words slipped 
a meaning much too wrong 

the smell of her haunts me 
he once told me 

I smoothed his hair 
and hushed him to sleep 
for now 
I said to him 
there is no time to weep 

I closed my eyes and tried to disregard 
the sounds of insecurity 
and the low hums 

of my breaking heart 

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

Exquisitely painful.
This piece is heart wrenching in a beautifully artistic way.
I was curious though about the low hums, is that representative of anything?
I'm thinking I'm missing the context of using that particular word.
I love this piece though and I mean in it's entirety.
My heart breaks with you.
Sincerely
Christopher

[Jupiter]

Thank you, Christopher.
Your words mean a lot since I do sincerely enjoy your work.
The "low hums" are meant to be representative of the feeling of your heart breaking. It is mostly metaphorical, but as I felt my heart wrenching at this moment, I felt the low hums of sadness sweep over me. Also, this was a lover I was laying with, tell me about his other lover that he missed. I couldn't let my pain be known, hence the low hums rather than the loud shattering. If that makes any sense.
Thank you again. It means a lot.

[Bri]

I really enjoy your poetry. You do such a great job of capturing emotions through your writing. Even though I haven't yet experienced the heartbreak you describe in your poetry, you make the emotions understandable and able to relate to.

[RachelReaper]

I'm officially a fan of the way you can write heartbreak. You capture its feeling exactly, though I'm sorry you had to go through that. I think if I were to read all your poems in a sequence it would tell a story.

[SarahV]

This is so melancholly, I cannot imagine how awful it much have felt - you have my sympathy... None the less a beautiful peice of work formed a a heart wrenching experience. Very tallented writer I can really feel the emotions running through this peice.
"I smoothed his hair
and hushed him to sleep
for now
I said to him
there is no time to weep " - this stanza really shows your compasion that you could be there for him even though it was destroying you inside. I'm inspired by your writting and your understanding/compasion. Keep up the good work, I also hope that the emotional pain has started to subside.

[Just Kim]

Deep and presonal, I can feel the ache in this

[Jupiter]

Thank you, love. The emotions were the true intent.

[OBWhiteHawk]

Another really amazing poem from you. I probably could sit here and read them all because they are so well done. Once again I hope that you work though the insecurity because that will mess you up more than anyone else could .

[Jupiter]

Thank you again White Hawk. That is a very high compliment and I really appreciate your feelings and honesty.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it is really tough when one we love cannot let go of the past..whether the previous significant other passed away, or whether the relationship just parted..

but when that person talks about the ex...we listen because we feel we need to be there...need to show that compassion..but it hurts, no doubt, it hurts.

good write. well penned.

[Jupiter]

Thank you, Jacob. That was a very nice meaningful reply and I really appreciate it. You put it into words very well how I was feeling at the time.