In Effigy

day old fish smells better than the roses you left on my doorstep
and when you shift your weight from one foot to another
I know you are lying

anyway, love

last night I burned rotten fish entrails
in effigy

a fitting tribute, I thought
to your smile

Reviews

[49k_jdys]

This is great! I can feel the anger in this piece. Love it!

[Jo Billygoat]

feel the anger, for some unknown reason made me laugh, no intentions of minimizing the pain or intent

[Pete]

very deep, strong. powerful. I felt anger, hate and a need for revenge. I would never want to do you wrong.

[Zugzwang]

This poem packs a punch. The last two lines are killer. Remind me not to get on your bad side!
Great writing and very compact.

[terry smith]

I love this!! so over it is a powerful message!

[Tate Morgan]

LOL that is so fitting the cold heart of a woman for a man who is branded a liar.

[Eagle Cruagh]

The smell of your burning fish entrails
makes me feel right at home.
I think that in a very few words you have
ruptured his self esteem, blackened his
soul and his eyes and made his feet sore.
Thank you,
---- John

[Revery]

Nice, the slivers of images, some literal and other metaphors tell such a large story for such few words.

[Derek S.Keck]

Yes! I love that this read like a (not so flattering) love letter! You bleed your emotions into your work and it makes for some mind blowing writing. I love your writing so much!