losing petals

that beating bleeding mess
thumps
and skips
a beat

maddening cadence
interminable tick

tick
tick

like a watch
losing time

or a flower
losing petals

but I do not wear a watch
and I refuse to lose my petals

Reviews

[Emily]

I love the ending!
Keep on writing

[Bohrium Guy]

Sweet! I love the simplicity and the visual imagery. Very nice to read and see. Thanks for sharing!

~Rob~

[terry smith]

Nice!! My eyes leaked sea petals of ocean flowers enough to cover davey jones locker with my love for her.

[Elizabeth]

Ah, Davey's locker...thanks for the review

[Arabdha]

one of the most brilliant pieces I've read !

[avant security guard]

nice

[Emily B]

I believe Emily Dickinson would smile and clap her hands upon discovering words like these. They are modern and powerful. Someone told me once that when opur words meet metal we can change the world.

[Elizabeth]

What a wonderful compliment, Emily. Thank you!

[paul]

i've lost the last of my petals...

[TheJordBaker]

an original, different, flowing, enticing, strong piece. nice work :)

[TJ]

Amazing and wonderful piece! Gives me a sense of triumph over adversity! Refusing to be beaten by the odds

[Lilly Negoi]

ouch...how well this fits the photo and my mood this morning...