Poison Apples

poison apples
taste sweeter
with sugar

salt in an open wound
tickles
if you close your eyes

and lies are the truth
if you stand
on your head

Reviews

[ROXANE DORSEY]

How bout them apples, pealing hey. thanks for sharing your lovely talent.

[DRAGO]

I like this. All true, in a nice metaphorical sense

[Insight "MH"]

Nice word play! That was amazing, you are so clever. Thank you for sharing.

Insight.

[Elizabeth]

Thank you for the compliment ;)

[Chase]

To write from the perspective of a character you love, in this case it is Alice, often can lead to the most interesting work that you will ever create. I like the shortness of this piece and the inverted way that it is written.

[Elizabeth]

That's an interesting perspective. The parallel to Alice was unintentional. Thank you for your kind review.

[Chase]

I tend to write from other mindsets often. Its enthralling to successfully plunk yourself into someone else's shoes. You're most welcome.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked this poem. Nice flow of thoughts led to very good ending.
"and lies are the truth
if you stand
on your head "
The above lines were my favorite. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[TrishArias]

Love this !!! every Alice!!

[Elizabeth]

Thank you for your review :)

[TrishArias]

*Very (sorry I misspelled, I was so excited lol)

[terry smith]

I liked this ALOT!! If you don't mind I would like to add some of your writings to my library.

[Elizabeth]

Thank you for reading!

[terry smith]

I love your style eventually i will read them all..I hope.

[Elizabeth]

I Appreciate the compliment. When my phone stops freezing, I will approve your friend request ♡

[terry smith]

Thank you!! and maybe you could read something of mine, I have a feeling you would appreciate my style of writing also.

[Elizabeth]

For sure ;)

[Justin]

that was really good :) u are able to get your message across in short form :) great job :)

[Relic]

You have a great imagination and the brevity packs a punch. Dark humor? Yes, I agree.

[absent]

Your poetry has this dark humor vibe to it, which I really enjoy. That second stanza made me laugh and cringe at the same time. This really convey the backwardness that is being human.