Surrounded by water

Surrounded by water, here I am, your lil daughter.

You walked on this, what it was a shame to have not be a witness.

 

I feel you around me, surrounded by you.

I feel your presence and I want you to know that I love you too.

 

You died on the cross, what a tragic lost, but you died for my sins.

And father, lately I've been a bad girl. My glasses; blury in the lens.

 

I can't see the right path and I can't be like you, that's all I want to do.

I've hurt people and I have lied and I fall to my knees now, and bow.

 

Please forgive me, for I know you won't unlove me, but I want you to be able to say,

"I'm proud of you, you're who you should be."

 

I will do my best and serve you right, not once did I go out of your sight.

You have been there from day one, and this is why I run.

 

I run into your arms this moment, and this is when I get the chance and I'll own it.

I will love you unconditionally; increcibly.

 

 

Reviews

[Chris38]

Incredibly moving and beautiful

[Greg Skura]

This is a Great Tribute! Well Done!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like how you told the story in the poem. I like the feel of thankfulness. I like the ending to the outstanding poem of faith and belief.
Coyote

[Moflo]

Very heartfelt religious poem that I think is very meaningful and true to its point. I like the metaphor of being surrounded by water and looking for a savior. Strong write, I think it came out good.