no title

your glowing smile hidden behind lies
your head floating in the skies
your angry eyes filled with hate
my words are coming a little to late
your vacant heart so empty and hollw
your words are a little hard to follow
you seem unertin and confused
i can tell your used and abused
as you lay down in bed
different thoughts run through your head
you dont like what he says to you
but know inside theres nothing you can do
you pack up everything inn your car
and drive away unbelieveibly far
so far that you cant even se
who you'll ever come to be
everyone knows and it shows
that you wont be coming back
to that place you used to call home
because there your forever alone

Reviews

[Steve]

This is well done.....

You are good!

[cfix]

Awe this is so sweet and so caring,
All with a twinge of sadness as well.
I really enjoyed this piece.
You have an amazing flow and rhyme scheme.
You are a very talented writer.

[steph]

this is a remarkable poem and i love how you made it flow so freely.. I also like the content, very sweet

[Somer]

Aw this is sweet, . Loneliness can get the best of us, it's horrible to feel lonely. This was well written. One part you wrote "se" instead of "see." I'd also suggest you add a title xD lol anyways, really good job I loved it! (: