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This is something i wrote about a year-year and a half ago. Not really anything to great, just something to start out with.

faces in the dark
draw out your fear
tell me again,
why i belong here
leaves in the park
fall from your tree
and leave your mother,
like mine did me
teddy in my bed
prepare so soak my tears
make me feel safe,
take away my fears.

Reviews

[steph]

this poem is so sorrowful... Longing for one's mother is hard. It's hard, esspecially if they leave you. They say they never will, but they do sometimes, and theirs just nothing we can do about it. I love how you feel for the friend in the poem understanding so much the pain of loosing one's mother, and I really enjoyed how you draw to a dear friend, your teddy, for the security and comfort, you so need at this sorrowful time. this poem, shows empathy, sorrow, and friendship beyond the ages.... I still have my teddy bear, and When my father died, i cried into his chest. your poem is great in style, the rhythm is superb, you have a natural flow and rhythm and it was a very enjoyable read. I am going to put this poem in my favorites list, so, I cand read it. I don't know of a title that would be proper in this poem, so I think you should leave it untitled, or if you want to title it,simply title it on the main emotion. a poem that speaks deeply as this, does good by itself with no tittle. God bless marvellous read!