I know it's sad but I find this really cute. It's like fighting against yourself whether to just raise your hands up and surrender to love or fight against it. Well, anyway, I love how you repeated the line over and over again! So despite putting random things, different scenarios, varied feelings, the poem still flowed smoothly. I really liked it. Just one thing though... "didn't choose" Sorry, "didn't chose" just sounded weird when I was reading it, so I can't ignore it. :| Other than that, this is brilliant. :)
my favorite lines
"Seriously?
I know i'm falling for you,
But I never wanted to!
I didn't chose you,
My heart did!"
... Those lines right there are so brilliant to me and that tells me that this poem came from your heart. This is such a beautiful piece of writing.
"Seriously?
I know i'm falling for you,
But I never wanted to!
I didn't chose you,
My heart did!"
I can really relate to this...
When our minds battle with our hearts, it is hard to decide...
Love is so painful that it broke so many loving hearts in this world...
You've penned this well...Nicely done...
:)))
Oh yes!!!!
Who the heart and soul fallin love with cannot be controlled, no matter
what the mind thinks....
the endless imagination, what if's etc etc take over.....
all this perfectly conveyed in this awesome poem :)
I know it's sad but I find this really cute. It's like fighting against yourself whether to just raise your hands up and surrender to love or fight against it. Well, anyway, I love how you repeated the line over and over again! So despite putting random things, different scenarios, varied feelings, the poem still flowed smoothly. I really liked it. Just one thing though... "didn't choose" Sorry, "didn't chose" just sounded weird when I was reading it, so I can't ignore it. :| Other than that, this is brilliant. :)
I am Beth/Bethan/Terri-Beth as my friends like to call, and I'm 15, 29/04/96, and started writing when I was about 13..? And now I get depression really bad and do things I should'nt and thats why I w.. more..