rejection

a girl , alone , enlove , broken . How is she expected to cope when the boy who keeps the skies blue is her bestfriend and she is too afraid to show her affection scared it will not be returned.

  REJECTION....

 

There is only one reason

 why my skies are blue,

My  wide smiles are true.

My eyes they twinkle all dat long,

I here birds singing the sweetest of song.

 

Because of him..

that boy right over there,

Sitting so flawlessly without a care,

I see him gaze at me once or twice

Can he tell he's my whole life ?

 

i cannot tell him of my affection,

Scared in return of icy-cold rejection.

How can i continue without him knowing?

Can' he see when he's around i'm glowing.

 

Maybe it's meant, i stay in silence,

But inside i feel violence.

I fight my body, command my brain,

If i tell him will it be the same?

 

Wondering helplessly, tears streaming fast

Wishing i could forget my past.

staring regreful at my reflection,

I knew i faced straight,bitter rejection ....

 

      

Author's Note

please leave comments and reviews are always welcomed !<3

Reviews

[bethany cullen]

Thannk you very much vesa xxx

[Vesa Lee]

Sugar spun sweetness at the start, a gathering cloud of anxious thoughts near the end. What a brilliant portrayal of the roller-coaster that is "young love". :)
This little piece is quite charming with its unaffected tone.
Well done!

[bethany cullen]

Your really are an amazing writer, do you read the twilight books ? and thanks but i still have a while to go before i am as good as you (if i get there) :) but thanks anyway that was sweet of you x

[Alana McGuire]

You're only 12? Woooow, you write extremely well for your age. Keep it up and you'll definitely make it far. :)
And thank you so much for saying I'm an amazing writer; that means so much to me. :)

[bethany cullen]

Thanks, yeah i seem to have a few errors however i don't really plan to submit this poem it was just to get my started so i'll just leave it lol :) Thanks for review mean alot :) especially because its from an amazing writer like yourself and ecause i'm only 12 lol :) x

[Alana McGuire]

This is really good! The only constructive advise I would give is that on the third line down, you accidentally spelled day with a t instead of a y. And the line "Can' he see when he's around i'm glowing." should have a question mark instead of a period. Also, I would capitalize the word I every time you use it.
But of course, those are all entirely up to you whether you fix them or leave them. I don't want to try to change your writing. :)
But overall, I really enjoyed this and the emotion you have put into it. Very, very well done! :)