Waiting for a hot dog

My

Valentine

Eats 

Marshmallow

Jello

Shots

Under

Neath

Planet X

VANS VANS VANS

Mismatched socks

and a pair of Cons

Backpacks strewn

across the lawn

Talking Heads

Take me to the river

Sun beats down

Wind the leaves of 

the trees

Reviews

[willweb]

Kind of abstract and mismatched in itself but in a very cool way. I like this. It feels like beat poetry.

[J.P.]

It's an old poor attempt at acrostic poetry in the first half. I jotted it down on a beautiful spring day while at college waiting for a free lunch. I was just listening and looking at everything and trying to take it all in.

[willweb]

Ok, but acrostic? I don't see it really. Not trying to be critical, just curious.

[J.P.]

Dude, I don't know if acrostic is even the right term. Ha ha. It was just a small moment in time that was simple and peaceful.

[willweb]

No problem. I completely understand

[J.P.]

It's a goofy piece, but one of my favorites.