Castle of Sand

Of what is temporary...

Building moments

        Sculpted.

Fortress foundation

             Shifting.

Rising tide

               Incessant.

Wash away

                       Illusion.

Dreams inside

                                Remain.

Author's Note

all comment is welcomed.

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

Well hello Mr Berry! I like how you can interchange almost all of your three word stanzas and create a different pattern of thought and if you take away the periods and let the last single word start the second two word line something else happens not sure if this is your intention but it rolls an ever changing rhythm and reason... I do this with my poems often and have a reluctance in punctuation for it but this is just bunny rambles:) A very nice flow in this write and a fine sentiment in its assigned formation

[LE Berry]

Thanks Bad bunny. hello to you also. My 'thing' is rhyming, I like to do it but I find it limiting...

[Robert Trakofler]

Keep doing it it will get better and bigger read Chris she is a rhyming genius