Living Stained Glass Window

Faith found within the natural world

Gazing upon magic and mystery,

chrysalis transforming caterpillar,

emerging as winged beauty,

stopping thought, giving pause.

Harmless in active creation,

the living stained glass window,

is not of temple or church,

it is moving silent and softly,

here and among us on earth.

Author's Note

I think my writing strong points are my story and character development, my weaknesses are punctuation and sentence structure. Any comments are welcome. Thank you.

Reviews

[Chryiss]

What a lovely metaphor for a butterfly to compare it to a stained glass window (correct me if I'm wrong).
You are surely right about the beauty in this world that can get overlooked in our daily routine. Sometimes we miss the small things that are truly beautiful in the scenery and background. I'm always amazed by the intricacy of nature and life.
Interestingly, due to the relative proportionality of syllables and length per line, this poem had a rhythm without rhymes. Very nice!

[Einstein Noodle]

i think you do tell a fine story ..i think the metaphor and personifications are strong and relatable ... i am a free verse guy at heart and gave up on "proper" punctuation ... i use it sometimes if i think it helps create the separations and pauses that i intend ..but i have found that dashes, points and empty space can be very useful ... in other words .. i am not one to help with punctuation ;} i thought immediately of the Monarch Butterfly as the window ... but i am sure there are many many more ... i like and agree with your commentary on physical buildings vs. the silent and soft among us everywhere ... inspiring and creative write says i! Glad to meet you LE! welcome to the Cafe'
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[Jade]

this is soft yet a longing, So very well written and expressed

[LE Berry]

Thank you Brandie Jade

[Jade]

not a problem