WHEN THE ALARM WENT OFF IN GOODCHILD LODGE

   

One day in Goodchild Lodge someone was cooking his trousers in the microwave and the alarm went off, so loud, that it could be heard as far away as America. In fact the din was so loud that nearby buildings collapsed all because of George Dumplings, one of the lodge residents. Because of the collapse of houses outside people had to be rehoused in other peoples’ cars. People returning to their vehicles saw what happened, opened up the doors and chucked the people out. But, where would they go now.

The answer:

"On the moon".

Moon transport buses came down from the sky and whisked the homeless up to the moon.

All of a sudden the collapsed buildings re- assembled themselves and the people made homeless by the collapse returned to their houses.

It was a man called Henry Opener who reversed the damage when he shouted:

"Houses, Come back to life, and they did".

The manager congratulated the magical man in finding a way to put collapsed buildings back together again.

The lodge’s alarm system was so destructive that it could cause the whole of London to collapse and die and, ‘who was to blame for this mad alarm system?

The answer:

Peter Doughnut, the mad scientist. He was a real madman who was born in a telephone box in Green Sausage Lane, Ilford. He had spent 600 times in a mental hospital. But, in the end the cause of his  mental illness was found out to have been caused by a banana  that grew in his brain

Once, Peter Doughnut squirted gravy into a radio set. For this he got sent to Dog Bowl Hospital.

On one occasion he shoved a dinner plate down another patient’s throat. The nurse arrived on the scene and put him into a bare room for two hours.

The Goodchild Lodge staff were told about the mad scientist and were relieved when he got put away.

The faulty alarm system got replaced in the end.

　

　

Reviews

[Emma Anderson]

I really think your title is very unimaginative. You need to rename your story to something that will grab peoples attention. And I'm sorry but your story is as creative as your title. It was quite boring and uneventful.
Try spicing it up a lot. I don't mean to offend you.