Revelation

There are several colors my eyes can see

I follow the blue and white paths

I will pick a few flowers where my heart leads

There are several words I can say

and they all suit my love best

I will only use what he wants me to say

No offense to Robert Burns, but 

My love is like a blue, blue lavender that's newly sprung in March

And since then my veins full of purple blood

No offense all the Gods, but

To prove creation was perfect, all they had to do was present you.

Maybe then there wouldn't be so many blood runs

God killed me and put me in heaven in your arms

and bad things don't happen in heaven

you leave me no choice but to forgive you

abuse all my good will.

After all, God made us do it.

Reviews

[Billy]

Really interesting use of color imagery creates a sense of vibrancy in this beautiful poem. The adaption of imagery to "My Love is Like a Red, Red Rose" is a very unique idea. The line "My veins full of purple blood" suggests your emotional state has been altered by the love described. The exploration of love here is definitely complex, and speaks to themes of devotion and forgiveness. There is a blurring of lines between heaven and earth and the use of religious imagery adds a real depth and complexity. Wonderful, wonderful poetry.

[D. Mansfield]

I like your writing I've read several tonight

[Beren]

Thank you sir!