blow the candle

blow the candle

A Poem by Beren

I was naked to you
with my clothes
in your favorite colored shirt
You saw me bare foot
with my shoes
But I felt the cold

Your words left a bitter taste
And had a knife affect
so I tattooed my mouth
To erase my kiss on your neck

I light my life and you came back
to blow the candle to the curtain
Leave me in the fire and left
I crawl to graves cause you crave to my heart
Pour cements on my road,
and keep me blind in your car
Didn't see your face beside your bluff
So you can make me believe a stranger's eyes are my love

You make me write poems even when my homeland is in fire

© 2025 Beren


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The raw emotion in your poem is palpable, Beren. The symbolism of the nakedness and the tattooed mouth speaks volumes about the pain of heartbreak and the desire to erase the past. The imagery of the candle, the fire, and the cement on the road conveys a powerful sense of entrapment and the struggle to move forward. The lines "Your words left a bitter taste / And had a knife effect" are particularly striking, encapsulating the sharpness of emotional wounds.

Your use of fire is intriguing, representing both passion and destruction, and the metaphor of the homeland burning adds a layer of external turmoil to the internal chaos. The poem is a testament to the enduring nature of love and pain, and the resilience to express oneself through art even amidst adversity. The final line is a poignant reminder of the universal nature of suffering and the healing power of creativity. Keep channeling your emotions into such profound poetry; it truly resonates.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Reiht

3 Weeks Ago

Your poetry is a gift, Beren, and it's an honor to experience the depth of your thoughts and feeling.. read more
Beren

3 Weeks Ago

I'm greatful to you, thank you for your kindness and courage and CONFIDENCE. Admire you, you are lov.. read more
Alice Reiht

3 Weeks Ago

Aw thank you :3



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tattoed my mouth to erase your kiss.... hahhaha that's good s**t man.. excellent writing.

fantastic I think. you are doing fantastic things with your writing. be careful though... it gets pretty weird (inside) if you take it too far

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


candle, fire, kiss .. that's a passionate combo. reading this one makes me sad to see the pain expressed in this poem, it comes through very clearly and darts through one's heart. can sense a heart with deep pain that needs an outlet to feel painfree again. written with all heart and honesty. keep writing and keep shining. there's always light and love waiting to be found again. life is a long road.. take care, Beren.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

2 Weeks Ago

Awww thank you so much!!! You understand my feelings then! But this story going better right now🌸.. read more
A.H.

2 Weeks Ago

you're always welcome, take care :)
I really loved the last line. That line is like attention shifter. Good poem

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

3 Weeks Ago

Ah thank you sir. I really wrote that part because my country is in crisis and felt guilty. Glad yo.. read more
Arundass TP

3 Weeks Ago

Politics is a curse of each and all countries.
Great write
Fave verse
Verse one excellent!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

3 Weeks Ago

Ahhh thank you!!!❤️
Candles can be blown out or snuffed. It isn't so easy with a raging inferno and the wind just makes it spread. So the question is how great is the fire in your heart? And who does it burn for?

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

3 Weeks Ago

These questions can make me cry... but I need to answer these. You are right. Thank you for taking t.. read more
sounds like one candle that's not giving light but rather darkness. when we open our hearts we become vulnerable. this hurts in its emotionally deep telling. regret doesn't have a good wick. well told.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

3 Weeks Ago

It's okay to be vulnerable to the right loves. But you just can't know what is right... thank you s.. read more
your writes are a welcome addition in the cafe
careful someone may become influenced thru your works ... i challenge them all 'to NOT to be'

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

3 Weeks Ago

As you told me before "their suggestions are theirs
to make change that suits them is to allo.. read more
Beren

3 Weeks Ago

Gosh I just read your comment again and made me smile so hard. Thank you🌸
keith

3 Weeks Ago

words of truth ... ya got it go'in on girl!
The raw emotion in your poem is palpable, Beren. The symbolism of the nakedness and the tattooed mouth speaks volumes about the pain of heartbreak and the desire to erase the past. The imagery of the candle, the fire, and the cement on the road conveys a powerful sense of entrapment and the struggle to move forward. The lines "Your words left a bitter taste / And had a knife effect" are particularly striking, encapsulating the sharpness of emotional wounds.

Your use of fire is intriguing, representing both passion and destruction, and the metaphor of the homeland burning adds a layer of external turmoil to the internal chaos. The poem is a testament to the enduring nature of love and pain, and the resilience to express oneself through art even amidst adversity. The final line is a poignant reminder of the universal nature of suffering and the healing power of creativity. Keep channeling your emotions into such profound poetry; it truly resonates.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Reiht

3 Weeks Ago

Your poetry is a gift, Beren, and it's an honor to experience the depth of your thoughts and feeling.. read more
Beren

3 Weeks Ago

I'm greatful to you, thank you for your kindness and courage and CONFIDENCE. Admire you, you are lov.. read more
Alice Reiht

3 Weeks Ago

Aw thank you :3
Your poem feels deep and sad. The "knife affect" and "tattooed my mouth" lines were powerful. I liked the candle part—it felt like losing hope. The last line was strong too. Some parts were tricky, but it made me think. Your writing is cool and full of feelings! Keep writing, enjoyed my visit.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

3 Weeks Ago

Ahh thank you Martiya❤️ glad you enjoyed this one.
I assume that you have intent for the meaning of the words, but... Without access to your intent, the reader has only what the words suggest to THEM. based on their life experience. And from that viewpoint:

• I was naked to you

So, someone unknown is claiming that they were in some unknown fashion, and for unspecified reasons, naked to the reader? Unless the reader had context as-they-read-the-words, to that reader they have no meaning.

• with my clothes in your favorite colored shirt

So...this person, for unspecified reasons has stuffed their clothing into the reader's favorite short? Seriously?

• You saw me bare foot with my shoes

Makes no sense. This piece reads like you used an online poetry generator.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


JayG

3 Weeks Ago

• bullying minors on a site FOR MINORS?

Well, I'll use small words so you can foll.. read more
Alice Reiht

3 Weeks Ago

Listen, I apologize for my harsh language, I said a few things I didn't mean at the time. But I do s.. read more
JayG

3 Weeks Ago

• But I hope you might understand when I say that we are trying our best.

That goes.. read more

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Added on March 22, 2025
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