window

"Just because you're in flames you think the whole world is in flames"

I used glasses

I used contact lenses

I did everything to remove the blur

I didn't leave the room

I didn't open the windows

Maybe the dust will get into my eyes

and I'll be condemned to more uncertainty

I turned on the lights

I turned off the lights

But the seasons didn't change

heard a sound

a bird singing

with a sweet sun taste

I cried

closed my eyes

It changed my vision for days

heard a sound

in a horror affect

a bird hit the window

got dizzy and fell

the window is dirtier now

the window is dirtier 

the window is dirty

I never touched the window

i didn't clean the window

that was the problem

not my eyes

I thought the world was bad because

 I saw what was behind the window blurry

The world was bad in my eyes

the World was dirty in my eyes

dirt in my eyes was nothing but the window

not my eyes

but the window

Reviews

[Lorry]

Sometimes it isnt what we see but from the perspective we view it. A bit like me saying the world is dusty because i havent cleaned my glasses.
All we need is a new perspective and fresher angle to see that there is much beauty in the world, if only we focus on it.
Thats not to say it is or will be perfect, but we can do little things to change our perspectives on tgis crazy rollercoaster ride we call life.

[Beren]

yes! you definitely understood everything I meant, a correct example. and as always, you made a great comment! thanks sir

[John the Baptist]

Indeed, sometimes we think the world is dirty, but the dirt is in our mindset.

[Beren]

Yes. Thank you for reading sir

[Everett Dulin]

The build up to the revelation was great, very nice powerful imagery. I do think if you chopped the first two lines of the last quintrain it would help with the flow. BUT it is great poetry nevertheless. Thank you for sharing this one!

[Beren]

To be honest, there is something that bothers me towards the end and I can't figure out what it is. There is too much explanation and I feel like I didn't let the reader understand and I felt like the flow was broken. Thank you. i'll edit when i can