Dear Daniel

It is written for fun as if singing in the C chord.

Dear Daniel,

I called the lawyer

signed the divorce material.

Thought we had love. 

Thought you were done. 

Thought we could get along. 

But you saw me, with all my homies 

cursing your name all around. 

I hope you hate me. 

Don’t call me baby.

I won’t ever want one. 

Can’t you just get over it when my body is in his bed 

can’t you just have a little pride, my cheeks are turning red. 

Dear Daniel, you’re a liar. 

That’s what I told everybody 

You don’t treat me like I’m a lady 

Daniel that was the home's  key. 

You still want me, love is blindly, but you are not my cup of tea. 

Don’t switch the letters A n E (denial) (denial) (denial)

to the Daniel 

don’t call me lover, 

cause I have never been the one 

Let’s make a deal 

not for a cover, 

cause I’m not carrying YOUR son

Reviews

[red93]

Fabulous Work again B, so well-crafted and put together. Excellent ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Beren]

that "again" made my day! thank you so much for your time!

[Dylan Macadham]

Hangers on, who can't move on ...hell for the One who let go, hell for the One who can't.
Painfully and Skillfully written!

[Beren]

hahaha i felt better while reading your comment! thanks sir!

[Dylan Macadham]

.........🙂

[Neville]

I bet you felt one hell of a lot better when you got this off your chest .. play it again ma'am and in whatever chord that you please .. Neville

[Beren]

i realized i wrote a darker version of this and if you hadn't commented i wouldn't have even noticed how similar they were. you can check out my last poem (every killer goes back to the crime scene) (the most brutal version of this one) i definitely enjoyed this one, the other one gave me the creeps

it scared me how unintentionally brutal it was in my head but it's still a good song.

thank you for reading sir! i am grateful!

[laika]

the denial bit is so clever! i adore how this reads like a breakup song that would go viral. did you write chords along with it [: ?

[Beren]

Yes, I mostly write my poems with my guitar or with a melody in my mind but this is definitely a song.
Thank you so much. I’m glad that you like that. Take care.

[Efxaris Arampatzi]

Beren, this poem is so powerful and unapologetic! "Don't call me baby, I won't ever want one." this line carries such raw finality, and it really stuck with me. The wordplay with "denial Daniel" is so clever, adding even more depth. I love this poem!

[Beren]

And after she says "I won't ever want one" she carries someone else's baby...
Ahh thank you so much! I really like your works and I'm so glad that you liked it!!
I'll visit your profile soon
Thank you for reading and caring enough to comment!

[Efxaris Arampatzi]

No problem at all, I loved it! :D

[A.H.]

this is like a song almost. you could beat your head to it with some rhythm. powerful expressions. the write comes off the page and hits hard. wonderfully written.

[Beren]

yes these are lyrics :)
ah i love your comments!! means a lot, thank you so much for reading and commenting!!

[A.H.]

You're very welcome, Beren.

[Everett Dulin]

More of that resent feeling, though a lot more forefront. Atleast you know they're thinking about you...

[Beren]

Is it always a good thing that they are thinking of me?

[Everett Dulin]

Attention is attention, take it when you can

[Beren]

Right. Thank you for reading pal

[poetgurl]

WOW, this is one powerful write and straight to the point.
Powerful to the punch!

[Beren]

AWW. Thank you so much for taking time to read and comment! glad you liked it!