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A Poem by Beren

I can only endure God's uncertainty
 and for that I got lost in too many lines
Being in the dark doesn't scare me
 if I'm the only one who turn off the lights
I am the one who turned off the glow of the divines

You don't cause me a sunny* day 
 just because you made me to listen Doris Day.
You can't turn the "perhapses" in my head into yeses 
 by asking me to dance.

I sleep in your arms wondering if you will leave me tomorrow
I stay close to the door so I can escape at any moment
You were bragging about turning winter into summer
It was just a climate crisis, honey

Every time I kissed you my lips would split 
 and we thought it was passion
Is red the color of love or blood?
When I told you I hated the movie The Notebook
 you should have known I couldn't stand these fights

You made me believe in the dream that an empty lot 
 would become a mansion
While carrying the bricks, you left me there
 and went to the nearest broken heart
I can turn this into a real poem but
 yours is just Conceptual Art.

© 2025 Beren


Author's Note

Beren
The Notebook is a toxic movie, let's face it.
Doris Day - Perhaps Perhaps Perhaps

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A heartfelt poem that reads raw and breaths pain. Pain is the twin sister of love infact they are conjoined twins. A Janus face if you would. Your poem presents this idea well that in this universe of ballance there can not be one without an equal amount of the other. Love without hate would not be love it would be emotionless. Loved the poem

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts on my work, that means a lot. I care about your reviews... read more



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Lacking Love, we crave it; having it we wonder it's worth ... budump bump that's Life! :)
I enjoyed this one, Beren.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much for taking time to read and comment. I’m glad you liked it.
Very heartfelt write here, this is wonderful

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much for taking time to read and comment! Have a nice weekend!
What a wonderful poem! The line "Is red the color of love or blood?" really touched me because it sets two different kinds of mindsets as you read it, a positive and a negative one of course and then you can't choose which one to follow since they both have their reasons to just make sense. I also love the specific mentions you make to Doris Day and the Notebook and how you blend them into the poem so well, kind of like a recipe. By the way, I love the Notebook but I agree it is toxic, the first time I watched and every other time for that matter it made me cry, but I still like the drama lol. Anyways, exceptional work!!! :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Efxaris Arampatzi

2 Months Ago

I loved it so it was my pleasure to read it! Yes the Notebook is a truly amazing movie but the fact .. read more
Beren

2 Months Ago

I didn’t cried to that movie… I'm in Türkiye, so I'm familiar with Greece news because we're cl.. read more
Efxaris Arampatzi

2 Months Ago

Wow that's so cool! We're basically like neighbours!
Fascinating how so much is left unsaid and implied in this interesting Piece. Really Excellent ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

2 Months Ago

Wow thank you so much for taking time to read and comment!!! Take care!
Red is both love and blood, love is both pleasure and pain, this really conveyed a familiar place to me, almost like a lake cabin, a cabin remembered fondly but visiting it remebered why its hated it, no electricity, no indoor plumbing, just something beautiful in the mind. Well done

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

2 Months Ago

Such a great example! Brilliant, loved it! Thank you so much for taking time to read and share your .. read more
Dave W.

2 Months Ago

Ditto dude, have a great day as well
I think red is the color of both...so maybe love is just concept and not a reality?
well, as Doris sang, "whatever will be will be."

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

2 Months Ago

"Love is just concept..."
This opened a new whole chapter in my mind, wow!
Yes, whatev.. read more
I think you should be more than a poet; an actor in a movie. You can do a better job than those movies you mentioned. Never watched them, but I can see you did not like much in them or the message.
An I Max will be a good change.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Beren

2 Months Ago

But can I be good poet in the future?
Beren

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much for taking time to read and comment, I loved your work and your review is everythi.. read more
Sami Khalil

2 Months Ago

You are welcome
As long as you stay in the arts, you will be fine.
Powerful work. Well crafted. Excellent.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

2 Months Ago

thank you so much sir, it means a lot to me. Since I watch your YouTube videos, I read your comments.. read more
Nicely written poem. A beautiful touch of feelings.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beren

2 Months Ago

ahh thank you so much sir for taking time to read and comment! take care

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