fairytale

I love you fairy tales, we've all been through

The sun hit my face as I woke.

I brewed two cups of coffee.

I called out to you.

I went upstairs and saw your bag next to the Creation of Adam... You weren’t home anymore.

I sat, thinking of careless Adam.

God stretched His body, Adam couldn’t lift a finger.

If I said this, you'd call me narcissist, slam the door.

You'd list reasons for Adam, proving God wrong.

I’d chase you, shout that I see a side that tries but can't fight.

But did Adam ever listen to God?

Back at the table, I sat.

The clock mocked me, counting the hours you didn’t return.

I looked at the cup, flowers faded.

Blue meant loyalty, now wilted.

I called friends for dinner�"

Friends I wouldn’t call if you were here.

They told me how much they hated you.

How I lost myself with you.

I said, “I know.”

I thought I found myself with you.

Do you remember our fights to sleep by the window?

You’d kiss me, say it doesn’t matter, I’m next to you.

Now I lie alone, not by the window.

I don’t want to sleep,

For fear you'll haunt my dreams, blaming me.

I’ll still wish for you when I wake.

“It’ll pass, baby, I’m here.

This time, the window side is yours.”

I’ll feel your kiss, your warm breath on my neck.

You’ll pull me close,

I’ll fall asleep with fairytales,

You telling me you love me, caressing my hair.

I woke up with the sun hitting my face.

Author's Note

I wrote this poem getting inspired by my friend Pekka's wonderful photographs. Thank you for letting me share it and for inspiring me by doing your job perfectly.
his instagram @pexxov

Reviews

[Zoa]

The poem is too good and the photos connect with the poem really well. I liked the line where you said "How I lost myself with you, I said I know, I thought I found myself with you". It's painful and this makes the poem even more beautiful!
Keep writing✨️
Happy New Year...hope this brings alot of happy moments to you✨️

[Beren]

Ah thank you so much, i really like that part also.
I am glad that you liked it!
Happy New Year, hope you are doing well!!

[ashley]

something about religious references in poetry is SO good to me. it evokes an indescribable feeling of wavering faith & strong beliefs and desires, i wish there were more like it! you perfectly described it all. i am LOVING all these chapters so far

kinda off topic; i wrote a poem about eve one time, i think its funny how you wrote about adam. we are just too in sync LOLLL

[Beren]

OH MY GOD! NO I REALLY MEANT GOD!!!
something terrible just happened and I was telling my friend that I had a dream about Halsey and your name is Ashley and her name is Ashley.

can someone tell us what happened here

and thank you for reading all the chapters I am really GLAD you liked it. i am in tears

[ashley]

omg be so serious this is so many coincidences HELLOOOO????? also i did NOT know halseys name was ashley. why is the universe literally aligning for us rn,

i am SO glad you share your writing with the world Beren, i loved every word i read

[Beren]

I don't know girl, but spring comes like this IN THE BEST WAY! so now please go to sleep ITS MY TURN FOR YOU

[ashley]

it most DEFINITELY does! AND OKAYYY IM GOING IM GOING I PROMISE

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the story and the photos in the poetry. You gave a in-depth look into a relationship. You create vision and you create thoughts for the reader. I have kept journals for 50 plus years and I read them sometime. I read them seeking understanding. I receive more questions than answers. Nice set-up of the poem. You held my attention till the last words dear Beren.
Coyote

[Beren]

" I receive more questions than answers"
What you are looking for is not in the answers, but in the questions, sir. Stop looking for the answer and make the question why you are asking this question a question, and you will find it. Nobody needs answers, everybody hears what they want to hear. But questions are more unfiltered..
i am really glad you like it! means a lot... and held attention till the last words... wow, i count this as a big success for me!
thank you for everything!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear poet. I like your work.

[August]

the photos added added more vividness to the poem.. beautifully written and such a nice read..i think you just found yourself a loyal reader..

[Beren]

oh my god! hello! this is such a nice thing to say! welcome here, hope you feel safe in between my words!

[A.H.]

I too like fairytales ... they always give you hope and make you happy.

This poem is so different - written in a structure melded with photos. I like the connection of the each stanza with each photo, they go so well and provides you with a context to read through.
Last stanza was the pick for me.

"I don’t want to sleep,
.....
“It’ll pass, baby, I’m here.
This time, the window side is yours.”
.....
I’ll fall asleep with fairytales,
You telling me you love me, caressing my hair."

And also, the way it starts and ends with the same line - tying together the whole write in a vicious circle. wonderful write, expressed beautifully. thanks for sharing, Beren.

[Beren]

There is the destruction of a relationship here, and in the end she actually dreams, she can only fall asleep like that. And the reason I made the beginning and the end the same is to show that this cycle continues every day. he is not there, but in her dreams.

i am really glad that you liked this. and having time to read and comment! i care about your thoughts so much! thank you for your time. take care

[A.H.]

certainly this wasn't a fairytale, as you say the poem is all about how a relationship was destroyed and aftermath of it. This write certainly brings all that and more. This write hits even more with that emphasis of the the cyclic nature, because that is even more painful when you can't break the cycle and have to live it and wake to it.
This captures the emotionally draining and is a very moving write.

Thank you for sharing. my pleasure to read and share thoughts. take care.

[redd Brick Keshner]

Well thought out, placed and put together, such a sense of organic unity. Reminds me of installation art Much enjoyed 🙏🏻🕊

[Beren]

ah thank you so much! i am really grateful that you visited my profile! glad you liked it!

[redd Brick Keshner]

Truly did and you’re welcome. Thank you for spending your time on my work. Your support is much valued 🙏🏻🕊

[red93]

Fabulous Work, and the Photos are great as well. Really interesting and moving ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Beren]

ah thank you so much!!! these means a lot for me and also for my friend!

[red93]

✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Arundass TP]

Composed poem with relevant photographs. Really loved it. Excellent writing

[Beren]

Thank you so much sir. Your thoughts are important to me. have the best week!

[Arundass TP]

Welcome friend.

[mymind]

Very nice poetry. I felt you lost someone you loved. May be I am wrong.

[Beren]

You are right. We have all lost someone we love at some point in our lives. thank you for your time, i am so glad that you read and like it! take care!