This is my feelings about a murder on the news that I am still not ready to talk about and I can't choose the right words for. The biggest pains are silent and they need to be talking about the most.
I used to sleep in pitch darkness
Now I only sleep when the sun rises
You caused that
We are talking with the girls how we gonna defend ourselves
And mom is warning me for not to have a boyfriend
We were the same age
Now we are the only ones who will grow with that pain of the women we never met
I try not to look at the news and think what he did
What he made you believe with his sickness indeed
News shows he is dead
He is death
He caused that
I see him in every guy I met
We haven't talked anything but that.
Still not enough cause people forget
Her mom won't forget.
I won't forget.
You caused that
This is my feelings about a murder on the news that I am still not ready to talk about and I can't choose the right words for. The biggest pains are silent and they need to be talked about the most.
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I cannot blame you for feeling the way you do....murder is atrocious, cruel, barbaric, and many times it pains us personally and we cannot let go of that pain....anger is part of pain .....and worst of all we keep that pain inside of us....silence...and you feel the need to talk about it as you should... I like your honesty and your chosen words in this piece...very nice!
Warmly, B
Posted 2 Months Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
2 Months Ago
I still can't look at this news. I still can't sleep every time I think about it. It's horrible! I d.. read moreI still can't look at this news. I still can't sleep every time I think about it. It's horrible! I don't know why God allows this. thank you so much miss. i really like your comments. take care . happy new year!
2 Months Ago
I don’t look at news either! I only watch certain shows that are more intellectual…always a plea.. read moreI don’t look at news either! I only watch certain shows that are more intellectual…always a pleasure; please check out my work!😊
Warmly
B.
Your poem is really deep and makes me feel how sad and scary things can change the way we see the world. I can tell you put a lot of feeling into it, and it made me think a lot. I know it might have affected you, but don't be scared, we all are here to comfort you.
Martiya
Posted 1 Month Ago
1 Month Ago
Oh my god! You are so nice, thank you but Please don’t read these violent included stuffs in here,.. read moreOh my god! You are so nice, thank you but Please don’t read these violent included stuffs in here, or in the news. Stay safe, keep your brain and heart peaceful!
1 Month Ago
Okay, sure! You are right, I will keep myself safe next time...
The words will come when you are ready. This writing is the first step in that direction of letting out some of those pent up overwhelming emotions.
Posted 2 Months Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
1 Month Ago
Oh I am so sorry, I just saw that review somehow?!?!
Yes this is so true, I had to pent up th.. read moreOh I am so sorry, I just saw that review somehow?!?!
Yes this is so true, I had to pent up then, now I’ll speak stronger. Thank you for reading and paying attention enough to comment!
I cannot blame you for feeling the way you do....murder is atrocious, cruel, barbaric, and many times it pains us personally and we cannot let go of that pain....anger is part of pain .....and worst of all we keep that pain inside of us....silence...and you feel the need to talk about it as you should... I like your honesty and your chosen words in this piece...very nice!
Warmly, B
Posted 2 Months Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
2 Months Ago
I still can't look at this news. I still can't sleep every time I think about it. It's horrible! I d.. read moreI still can't look at this news. I still can't sleep every time I think about it. It's horrible! I don't know why God allows this. thank you so much miss. i really like your comments. take care . happy new year!
2 Months Ago
I don’t look at news either! I only watch certain shows that are more intellectual…always a plea.. read moreI don’t look at news either! I only watch certain shows that are more intellectual…always a pleasure; please check out my work!😊
Warmly
B.
The anger is palpable in these words. not that there is anything wrong with that. you should absolutely speak your truth. and not long ago i confronted someone who wronged me and i will from now on always speak up against wrong-doers. anger is a gift. it's what allows us to protect what we value. and there are a lot of people out there who wish to do harm.
Posted 3 Months Ago
3 Months Ago
being angry is okay. because if you are angry that means you are paying attenion, you care. anger is.. read morebeing angry is okay. because if you are angry that means you are paying attenion, you care. anger is a power. where there is anger there is pain also.
use your power my friend. you will be more than okay. take care
3 Months Ago
thanks. i will do. and let's make sure we are angry at the right people. long live Luigi.
Good morning from Spain,
Life is full of hate and horrible things but then again it is also full of beauty and love.
Your poem is so sad and it is good that you wrote out your feelings.
My only suggestion is to keep it in the same tense... for example
"I see him in every guy I met"... should be meet... I see him in every guy I meet.
Hope you are okay with my saying this?
Lisa
Posted 5 Months Ago
5 Months Ago
Thank you so much for your time and attention and suggestions. Have a great weekend
Who needs to tell ghost stories these days when we have the news to cause us horror. Or as the Beetles once sang, "I read the news today, oh boy". But the beauty here is how an artistic mind like yours can take those morbid facts and make them into art. I do love to see that. It was a deeply sad and moving. Thank you for sharing.
Posted 5 Months Ago
5 Months Ago
Wish tragedies were only remained in the movies, and The Beatles is always right; "when the broken h.. read moreWish tragedies were only remained in the movies, and The Beatles is always right; "when the broken hearted people living in the world agree
There will be an answer, let it be" or "All you need is love".
Your comment make me so happy ma'm, thank you so much. Wishing you the best day.
To feel such horror shows your heart and mind's goodness and as such, must always speak out, however painful to Self. That said your own feelings are being faced as you write. Life is full of hell and more, but is best to value the kindness and love floating around our planet to be shared with anticipated hope and joy. Never, never bow to the power of evil, weigh it against the strength of Good The 'oo' is the double sign of eternity
Posted 5 Months Ago
5 Months Ago
You said it too well. But I believe world is mostly a "good" place. Infinite. Thank you so much for .. read moreYou said it too well. But I believe world is mostly a "good" place. Infinite. Thank you so much for your time and attention