fall

it's the season of love <3

i thought moon only can be seen from my balcony

your hands are touching my soul

if i feel the wind like gravity

flying will be my goal

leave the oldest wine on the shelf

and tell me im your love

if you dont want to create a dance

i'll fell from the above

cause your voice reminds me of the spring

like when kids laughing at April fools

or like the cats on the March

or playing outside on the May

your body reminds me of the summer

like late Mediterranean nights

or the Aegean's daylights

or just the warmness i can't run

your eyes reminds me of the winter

that cold baby blue like drugs

shines like Christmas lights

you were my wish from the Santa

i'm "fall"ing for you

i'm "fall"ing for

i'm "fall"ing

i fell.

Reviews

[Marie]

A very warm, sweet, romantic poem, finely penned and beautifully expressed. Depiction of falling in love and of all the charms of the poetess' lover are painted in colours of gold and silver. Love the layout of the final verse as I read it, it reminded me of skydiving, falling, falling, falling and finally fell (in love). Lovely work, Berenongur. I enjoyed reading and thank you for sharing...

[berenongur]

Falling in love feels like I'm being pushed off a mountain, you don't realize how beautiful the view is below while you're hoping the parachute will open. You just hope someone will catch you and wrap his arms. That's what falling feels like. I love the detailed comments you make on the poems, you make me feel like my opinions matter. So thank you, take care

[Marie]

Most welcome always...

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

this work really goes in an unexpected direction. full of pathos, but in a much more dreamy and surreal way. i was really taken by how delicate these lines were crafter and how freely it moves from fragmented memory to hallucination to sensation. it's full of lines and turns of phrases that i liked.
your hands are touching my soul
or playing outside on the May
that cold baby blue like drugs
it's moving, but it's smooth, and it makes me want to slow dance with the moonlight.

[berenongur]

that story actually aged like milk. It's funny how memories now feel painful. I fell from there and then he left me there. I'm back on my feet now but I still have a few scars from that fall.
even tho still, i like this poem.
thank you for reading sir. finally you found something on my page that makes you want to dance!!!

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

sorry to hear that... if it makes you feel any better, i am also down on my luck.
but poetry from all stages of your life should be shared. when you write words down they take a life of their own and it needs to see the light of day. so thanks double for sharing this work. i enjoyed it and i look forward to reading your other works.

[Chris]

a very well done final stanza...

[berenongur]

thank you sir, i am glad you liked it. take care

[Chris]

You've a good way with your words.

[berenongur]

You're gonna make me cry, you're spoiling me

[Chris]

Don't you know - some people NEED to be "spoiled" at least once?

[berenongur]

There is a lot to learn in life i guess... i am glad i am in some people for now.

[Amy R]

What a brilliant poem about love. Love something that makes everything feel like a dream.
I enjoyed this poem, has a good structure, and rhymes very well. Thanks for sharing.
-Amy

[berenongur]

Ahh thank you so much ma'm. I'm so glad you reviewed cause I like your work. Have the best day

[Amy R]

Thank u and you're welcome..

[Lisasview]

Could be a lovely romantic song. Really did like it very much.
Lisa

[berenongur]

thank you glad you like it

[Simone Davis]

I love the structure of your poem and the words remind me of when love was the biggest most important dream I had and now reminds me of how we have to keep this love alive. I really enjoyed this poems thankyou

[berenongur]

LOVE IS ALREADY THE BIGGEST MOST IMPORTANT DREAM!!! love gives the faith to live i think, thank you so much for your comment

[Abhilash Hegde]

romance is brewing. this is a perfect love poem with all elements in it. there's nothing like have that feeling of butterflies in tummy, just reaching out every moment and to be experiencing the feeling. The poem flows smoothly with beautiful verses. Thanks for sharing.

[berenongur]

i mean i am just a teaanger and i am just a girl, what can i do, right? haha thank you so much for reading and paying attention

[Abhilash Hegde]

teenage years are the most exciting part of our lives. have a ride, enjoy the sunshine and the rain :)

[Thomas W Case]

Beautiful and romantic. Excellent work.

[berenongur]

thank you sir, have the best day

[Soren]

Romantic and sensual it has a rhythm to it that carries one onward to the end. Nicely done

[berenongur]

THANK YOU. i love your poems so much, im so glad to hear this

[Lydia Shutter]

"leave the oldest wine on the shelf
and tell me im your love"
A glorious love poem filled with rich imagery and so much romance. I liked it. Lydi**

[berenongur]

ahh thank you so much, it is really a lived quote for me. hope you can't relate, hope people you love always love you sober