crowded loneliness

I feel that loneliness that you can only feel at home
You hear the talks and laughs but you are not in one
They say they are here if you want to talk
But if I ever make a sound they'll make me want to walk
away

You can eat in your bedroom but why don't you want to stay with us
I haven't eaten last 3 days, did they realize
Called the doctors but didn't buy the pills
But they asked, and at least this is nice

I would run if I had a chance, If I knew they wouldn't send wolves after
I would cry if they wouldn't make this a big laughter
I would be myself, if it wasn't forbidden in here

I feel that loneliness that you can only feel at home
But when the doors closed and locked in my bedroom
I can breathe in my kingdom
I feel that crowd that I can only feel when I'm alone

I would love her, if she were my child
I would love you, if I were your mom
You wouldn't feel alone at home
Wish I could be enough for you, alone

Reviews

[A.H.]

Ah! this is such a touching piece, so delicate and emotional. I read every line as though I'm living it. Such emotions, that feeling of being lonely at home, although you're home. You did great job here on with words, lines and thoughts on the paper. Poetry is a way out many a time, it's our opening, it's our chance to be ourselves and more. I so like this one, it is written with utmost sincerity in expression. Thanks for writing and sharing this berenongur. More power to you, best of times, health and happiness.

[Beren]

Oh man, I’m so sorry, I probably couldn’t discover. How can I comment when I first get into café. And I just realized these reviews. What a shame!

But still, You Are a great poet and you used to like that too. That’s a whole proof! Haha.
This comment is so deep, And I’m just gonna forgive you cause I just saw that. 🤪
but I meant it, really, you are really good with your words! I am glad to know you were here since the first day I started!

[A.H.]

No worries at all. You're most welcome, Beren :) Glad to read your writes, keep 'em coming. Take care.

[Samuel Dickens]

This is such a sad and desperate situation, and one that cries out for a remedy. My hope is that someone with the power to change things takes notice. No person should be devalued like this.

[Beren]

I'm so sorry sir. I posted this when I first started the site and I guess I didn't discover how to comment at the time. I noticed this comment of yours now while looking at my old poems.

Thank you very much for your comment, it was very meaningful at that time and still very meaningful, you are right, no one should experience this.

[Arundass TP]

Loneliness can be made creative and overtime heaven. The same loneliness can take you to fear, mental emergencies. Great poem. Really psychological

[Beren]

Sir, I'm so sorry when I just started the site, I didn't notice this comment and I saw it while looking at my old articles. And I'm so glad you like it, I'm really glad with your comment when I saw it. Your words are really very meaningful, it's like you wrote a poem even in a simple comment. Thank you very much and I'm sorry again!

[Arundass TP]

Welcome friend 😊