Nigeria

A poem about the woes of my country

Oh Nigeria, my Nigeria

The land on the Niger

That blessed land

Land of great hopes

Place of great glory

Country of beauty

My land of dwelling

Place of my birth

Land of great serenade

Giant of Africa

Trigger of Africa

The eagle of my continent

Oh Nigeria I wail for you

Land of great minds

But of small achievement

Land of bright hopes

but of dead talents

Land of diversity

but of crisis

Land of riches

but of poverty

Land of the majority

but of minority

Oh great Nigeria

Oh Nigeria

your flag soiled

in the corruption

of your leaders

Your serenade

polluted

by their stupidity

Oh Nigeria,My Nigeria

your children lie dull

for their schools closed,

your men angered

for their salaries unpaid,

your women wail

for their struggle to eat,

your senior citizens

dead waiting for their pension,

your economy

crash in all

while our leaders

sit and laugh to scorn

our impoverishment

while they share

the loot of our glory

the fruit of our labor

the honor of our travails

the wage for our jobs

But despite our storms

our cloudy economy

our public status

our problems

I still believe we have a way out

a light in our dark tunnel

a solution to our problems

a key to our cupboard

a cure to our disease

but in all these 

we must come together as one

for in unity is strength found

Two heads is better than one

so we will assemble on that day as one

to solve our grievous mystery,

our case 

And bring the unjust to book

such is my dream for Nigeria.

By

Benson Osuji

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Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree and I hope.
"we must come together as one
for in unity is strength found
Two heads is better than one
so we will assemble on that day as one
to solve our grievous mystery,"
Africa is a ancient place. Need to dig deep and find the wisdom of old. Work as a team. Become strong once again. Africa been the central part of the world and need to be today for the new generation. A powerful. I liked it.
Coyote

[Benson Osuji]

Thanks a lot I agree with your view that Africa must come together as one

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. Good words for the hope of better days.

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

Wow....what a poignant write about the woes of your country....an eyeopener for sure. I love that you have so much hope and a wonderful upbeat attitude that there is light at the end of the tunnel.

[Perkele.7885]

Benson, you are an above average writer in a language that is not your own, very commendable, indeed.
You love your country and you are readily admitting the corruptness that is defeating your own people. Most compelling, most compelling,indeed!
Your writing is excellent; your English grammar is not! A lot of short-cuts are taken with grammar and punctuation, use of complete sentences etc when writing poems. However, I feel that some punctuation is always called for. Always!
line#1 Oh followed by comma
Stanza2 line#1 Oh followed by comma Nigeria followed by comma
line#3 but followed comma
line#5 but followed comma
line#7 but followed comma line#9 but followed comma line#11 but followed comma
Oh followed by comma Great Nigeria
Stanza3 line1 Oh, followed by comma
Stanza4 line1 Oh, followed by comma
Stanza5 line1 But, followed by a comma line#10 but, followed by a comma
line#13 two heads (are) better than one
line#12 strength is (not is strength)
line#14 so, followed by a comma
line#17 And needs to have a small a
line#15 no need for a comma after the word mystery

There are other errors but, these are the ones that jumped right out at me.
Using capitals are not required if you are not using sentences nor, are periods
I would use question marks as called for and quotation marks always
As you can see, commas are very important

[Benson Osuji]

Thank you so much I'll definitely improve in the areas mentioned

[mattavelli]

I think it's great! I noticed you switch from "your" to "our".

[Benson Osuji]

thank you for the review

[Benson Osuji]

please review this poem thanks