Chess

His board is weak.

It was set up that way.

 

The player tends to the

Defunct constitution

Of scattered particles,

 

He sees no end, playing

only for incremental

advantage, becoming

 

Lost in the grey between

the pieces and

the person.

Reviews

[NeiL ArandA]

I like the way you compare a player who play without purpose, objective and goal. Just merely moving pieces without conscious effort or foresight of where its going . What is worse than losing a sight ? When we lose our vision...

[Joe Curtis]

One of the best opening lines I've read in ages

[KillerWithWords]

WELL DONE!
(sorry didn't mean to scream)
You've really got a nice handle on the meter.
i really like how you started off: "His board is weak. It was set up that way."
Great line.
Great poem...

[Emily]

I really like this! Love the last stanza!

[teardrop]

wow very nicely written and expressed

[Mir]

This poem proves that you can write about absolutley anything and it can be turned into a form of art! Great job! This was definitley a unique piece! :)

[Ben Martin]

Thanks Miranda, that's very kind of you.

[Mir]

you're welcome! :)