Beautiful descriptive verbs at the end of the first stanza. I love that it is illustrating the never ending battle to find oneself. Very relatable as I believe most people go through soul searching throughout most of their lives. I also like that you used stained glass. It is harder to see your reflection in it, as the images in it are influential and prominent.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you! I've been talking deep thoughts with a lot of my friends and reading a lot more poems and.. read moreThank you! I've been talking deep thoughts with a lot of my friends and reading a lot more poems and other writings on this site lately, and I keep seeing the battle to find oneself and deep soul searching, and it's wonderful because everyone describes it differently based on their experiences and who they are, and because everyone has their own dreams or visions of fantastic reality which exude in their writing in unique, magical ways, always circling or spiraling the same core of emotions and ideas. Stained glass is one of my day dreams (or night dreams rather, but I see it while awake). Thank you for your description of stained glass - it reflects my feelings exactly in a way I hadn't fully considered.
Beautiful descriptive verbs at the end of the first stanza. I love that it is illustrating the never ending battle to find oneself. Very relatable as I believe most people go through soul searching throughout most of their lives. I also like that you used stained glass. It is harder to see your reflection in it, as the images in it are influential and prominent.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you! I've been talking deep thoughts with a lot of my friends and reading a lot more poems and.. read moreThank you! I've been talking deep thoughts with a lot of my friends and reading a lot more poems and other writings on this site lately, and I keep seeing the battle to find oneself and deep soul searching, and it's wonderful because everyone describes it differently based on their experiences and who they are, and because everyone has their own dreams or visions of fantastic reality which exude in their writing in unique, magical ways, always circling or spiraling the same core of emotions and ideas. Stained glass is one of my day dreams (or night dreams rather, but I see it while awake). Thank you for your description of stained glass - it reflects my feelings exactly in a way I hadn't fully considered.
So many mistakes
Which seem inevitable in the course of trying
I was only trying to be
But I've made people mad
And made others cry
Hurt myself beyond repair
And I can see some of the future
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