Trick Candle

Burn burn

It only sparks

When you blow it out

Burn burn

Like a trick candle 

On a birthday cake

Burn burn

It never ends

It's hot again

Burn burn

The harder you try

The stronger the flame

Keeps burning

For a moment a flicker

Catches your eye

You're convinced

This time it will die

Burn burn

Melting wax

And blackened wick

Burn burn

Some things are 

And some will be

But the candlelight

Still holding on

Calls to me 

Like an angry song

Burn burn

All the pages

Flicker on

Flicker off

Burn like a torch

Smolder like the cinders

Still bright

Still lit

Burn burn

Like the blazing fire

I know exists

Burn burn

If the candle holds

I'm coming home

Burn burn 

Flicker off

Flicker on

Reviews

[JoshiDx]

I love the repetition of the simple phrase "burn burn" throughout. I thought it might grow wearisome after a while, but your wonderfully phrased lines that lie between it keep it fresh. Each well-crafted phrase adds to this sort of simmering tension that you build, propelling the story gently forward. Overall I say well done!