Counterfeit

Counterfeit

A Poem by Ashley Griffiths
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Thoughts…..

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Counterfeit


It started yesterday

I miss you already

I see future’s hold

Written all over you

It started yesterday

As I sat looking at the world

Through a child’s eyes


And the way you look tonight

Is counterfeit

How can I explain?

When you can’t relieve my pain

How can I exist?

If you can’t believe the risk

I take everyday

Just to be counterfeit.


It started yesterday

I miss you already

As I see past’s hold

Climb all over me

It started yesterday

When I was haunted

By images on ID cards


And the way you look tonight

Is counterfeit

How can I explain?

When you can’t relieve my pain

How can I exist?

If you can’t believe the risk

I take everyday

Just to be counterfeit.


Then a crescendo of tsunamis hit

Leaving truth in their wake


Hide if you want

Be yourself if you must

Just do it because……

You want to!




© 2014 Ashley Griffiths


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I like how you personified both "past" and "future" in each "verse," if you will. It makes it seem like the narrator is trapped under a physical weight of time with the person she's speaking to. In addition, I like the defense mechanism "Hide if you want" the narrator allows her audience. It's rare to find an acceptance of the false pretenses humans put on to protect themselves. Loverly!

Posted 9 Years Ago


I love you wording Ashley! Good job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ashley Griffiths

10 Years Ago

Many thanks!
"It started yesterday. I miss you already" - Such a simple line that captures so much emotion. I don't know why but that line really spoke to me from the poem as a whole. Great write! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ashley Griffiths

10 Years Ago

I am glad that you liked it.
This read like it could be a song, and a gorgeous one at that, sung by Christina Perry or someone with a melancholy persona. I thought it was absolutely gorgeous.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ashley Griffiths

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much. :-)
love how this started and ended :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ashley Griffiths

10 Years Ago

Many thanks!

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Added on September 9, 2014
Last Updated on September 9, 2014
Tags: life, Modern, Future, Youth, Communication, Technology, Love, Truth, Lies

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Ashley Griffiths
Ashley Griffiths

Thailand



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I love to view the world around me, the connections and movements. Every second gives an opportunity for inspiration and writing is my effort to articulate the innumerable stimuli that the world pres.. more..

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