Golden Lights, Silver Nights

comparing and contrasting mornings and nights...

Morning:

Golden light upon the sky,

The glow after night.

Uncomfortably warm,

Way too bright.

Time I'm in drowse,

Not fully awake.

The time I want to

Jump in a lake.

Time of the day,

That I hate.

Here goes the bus,

Oh dang! I'm late!

 

Night:

Silver stars,

Upon the night's sky.

The days almost gone,

But why?

The cool of the dark,

Chills me thoroughly and through.

Personally I love the night,

Do you?

Man I am tired,

Time to say good night!

Oh don't forget,

TURN OFF YOUR LIGHT!

   beefjerky

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

day time is boring... nights are too short...

Reviews

I completely agree with your thoughts on this.
Good imagery. It just seems like you just wanted to get the poem down, because you start off with nice, flowing imagery, and then it gets abrupt.