Hope in Reality

Hope in Reality

A Poem by beefjerky
"

dashing for my dream...

"
I see it around the corners
I see it when I dash through streets
I see it as I dash through streets
I see it while on rockets.
I see it when I jet onewhere to another
I see it as I hurl through winds
I see it chasing after--->                                                 me.---
                      BOOM IT STRIKES        |
                                         Then closer,                                      v
                    Then closer,
Then closer,
              Racing faster than Comcast
                and many other networks
                           I start with a
                                 !M00EI
                            Then finish with my hopes and dreams
                                      as
                                       R
                                       E
                                       A
                                       L
                                       I
                                       T
                                       Y
                                  beefjerky
 

© 2009 beefjerky


Author's Note

beefjerky
confusing order...

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I love the layout, it brings the whole piece to life! Really nice work with this, I enjoyed it.

-Howl

Posted 15 Years Ago


I actually deeply like the layout of this one... it makes the reader slow down a bit. The order made me read it through twice... but sometimes I can be a little slow, so no worries. When reality smacks you in the face, that's when you start learning more and more about yourself. Reality can be harsh though. But unlike the cold, harshness of reality, your words gently explained the topic.
Keep writing,
emmie.

Posted 15 Years Ago



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