Come On Beautiful

About a heart breaker.

Your betrayal is art

that will one day come back to haunt you.

You keep breaking hearts with no remorse

to what others feel & you know it's true.

 

Come on beautiful

break another heart.

Look in the rear view mirror,

watch her fall apart.

 

Come on beautiful

waste another life,

Let her believe

she could one day be your wife.

 

Do to her

what another will one day do to you.

You'll eventually find

sometimes girls are untrue.

 

Come on beautiful

ask for trouble.

Karma is a b***h

& you'll get double.
 

Author's Note

Nothing's Perfect,Don't be too harsh please!!!

Reviews

[kitty_kelley]

I love the irony of Karma.... ^_^

[Mr. Lopez]

I loved this !! Betrayal is such an ugly coat to wear. Yet so many never think twice befor putting it on. I am a true believer of karma. Maybe thats why i liked this so much . Great job.

Mr.Lopez

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh yes it is true you get what you give and people like that wind up alone when no one finally trusts them... very well done my friend.

[An owl on the moon]

Powerful in your expressions of love that becomes twisted betrayal. And yes, it does come back around!

Craig

[Lyndsay Castro]

I get a very strong feeling of power in this. It's powerful, you're powerful, and your art is powerful. And of course, the flow is perfect. Kisses! LC

[Alice]

You get better and better every time, I really admire how you've honed your writing from being very emotional but shambolic into something as tightly woven and smart as this without losing any of the feeling. "Look in the rear view mirror" - spot on imagery.
The rhythm works perfectly and the end gave me a smile.
I'd really like to see you go completely out of your comfort zone, because my one criticism would be that you always stick to what you know you can do - rhyming poems generally about or related to love - so I reckon it'd be good if you could try a completely different style of writing, really let loose and experiment so your work stands out from the rest.

[Donna]

I loved it. I like your writing style. It hits home and your right Karma is a b***h.