All Day Forever

I wrote this in thought of someone special that has no idea how I feel....

As I stand here in the summer rain

I can't help but love the feeling of the rain gracing my skin.

I could stand here all day

In the rain.

 

As I stand here in the breeze

I can't help but love the feeling of the cool air blowing my hair off of my neck.

I could stand here all day

In the breeze.

 

As I stand here in the sun

I can't help but love the warmth of the rays kissing my skin.

I could stand here all day

In the sun.

 

As I stand here in the snow

I can't help but love the way everything seems to be silent as the snow falls lightly to the ground & the way the cold air kisses my cheeks just enough to turn my cheeks pink.

I could stand here all day.....with a cup of coco

In the snow.

 

As I'm here in your arms

I can't help but love the butterflies you give me & the way I can smell your cologne just enough & the way you make everything around us disappear.

I could stay here forever

In your arms.

Reviews

[Mr. Lopez]

A smash hit ! Very loving and tender words . I loved the way that you bring it all together and using all of the components of nature. Including love , which comes so natutral to us all. Probably one of your best poems . Well done !!!

Mr.Lopez

[+xDrunkenFairytalex+]

I totally didn't expect the last part. This is deffinately a beautiful write. I love how you make all the seasons seem so sweet. .... man... I want it to be fall already. I love the colors of the leaves. I could truly stand there forever, off in my own world, looking at the beauty of the world around me. [you're still amazing]

[Sarah]

This is really beautiful. You captured every season perfectly and played on the senses with your vivid description, to the point where I could taste the snow as it fell & smell the flowers of spring. =) You have a lot of talent & this was a worthwhile read!!! =)

[Lady Lazarus.]

absolutely beautiful.
makes me think of a first kiss,a kindred spirit,finding your place in life.
incredible way with words....
beautiful.

[Alice]

The last two stanzas are my favourite thing of yours I've ever read, they really flow and the imagery is gorgeous and you've expressed your feelings in a less literal manner.
The first three are a little more clumsy though, I think repetition could work in this poem but because the second line of each of these isn't as original as the rest of the poem it lost my interest. I would be able to find the phrase "the warmth of the rays kissing my skin" or similar in countless pieces of writing. Whenever you write something that's on a subject like love that's been done lots before, it's a good idea to go through afterwards and check for cliches - if you spot any, think of a different way to say it that's completely individual to you.

[SamBug]

This was very beautiful. It moved my heart.

[An owl on the moon]

This is so very soft and beautiful, moving around us like a gentle breeze. Your love can be felt so deeply here, and the repeating form is so perfect. Wonderful work!

Craig

[Enigma]

*sighs*
That was one of the most romantic poems I've read till now. So sweet, so romantic.....wow!!
I started reading aloud and couldn't get my eyes off the screen. Well, the screen kinda vanished with all the beautiful imagery that you used. I just lived through all the seasons and enjoyed each moment of it...
Thanks to you...
The format you've used here is amazing. I loved the flow which was smooth and the lines really struck a chord. Yeah! I can relate to it...a little.
It's hard for us to hide our feelings as the eyes today have become expert in tracking the 'love' in our eyes or our actions...lolz
Will have to wait till the right time comes.
Here's a suggestion. You give the poem to the guy saying that "I read it on here and thought you'd like it"...lolz
It's a just a suggestion ^_^
Once again, GREAT POEM!! I LOVED IT!! VERY WELL PENNED!!!

[Ally Baker]

this is a great poem, i can relate to pretty much all of it. i think you have a real talent for writing. you should definately keep writing, you ha ve some really good writes that i love. :]

Luhv,
~Ashley A.

[Chloe Madison Taylor.]

if you could learn how to put more metaphors or play with words a little bit more I think you could really be good.
just try and do something different.