Illusions Over Infatuation

I'm not sure why i wrote this I just did.

As you pull me close

& look me in the eyes,

I feel the tension

I feel the vibe.

 

My heart beat speeds up

As you slowly kiss me,

You make me feel wanted,

As if you want to see,

Inside my heart.

 

Your kisses become a more intense flow of emotions,

I finally know exactly how you feel.

I finally know,

This is the real deal.

 

As you pick me up

I realize,

I'm falling in love,

Looking in your eyes.

 

We lay here holding hands

Under this night sky,

You whisper to me,

"For you I would die".

 

The alarm goes off,

It was all in my head.

I start to cry,

As I lay in this empty bed.

 

Why can't you really feel that way?

Am I not good enough?

Why  is it so impossible

For us to really fall in love?

Why are all these people

holding us apart?

Reviews

[Enigma]

Wow!! One of the msot romantic pieces I've read today. The ending was quite unsual because I was expecting a happy endling. But it makes your poem different and all the more interesting. It has a mesmerizing flow. It really spreads itself into the reader's mind and it can't think of anything else. All the time I was reading this, I could easily visualize it as if I was seeing a romantic movie...lol
This one's really good!! Well Done!!...keep writing ^_^

[otter]

I love the change-up.

[Lyndsay Castro]

I've so been there.

[...]

Okay, first of all I love your title. :] It definitely drew me in and made me want to read this!

Second, I like the flow of this and the "plot", if you will.
Because I can easily relate. XD

My favorite part:
"Why is it so impossible
For us to really fall in love?
Why are all these people
holding us apart?"

Nice! ^^

[John Stussy]

Unrequited love. :( Not an easy situation to deal with at all. I hope the situation improves, he might come around or something. Keep your chin up, if it doesn't happen there are some other great guys out there who will see you for you.

[mick weller]

`I'm not sure why i wrote this I just did`
I'm not sure why you wrote this either, but I'm glad you did...
for it touched my heart, thank you!
Why can't she feel that way?
Am I not good enough?
... and why *do* all those people hold us apart?
my! you really cut to the chase with that questioning...
ah, the dream and the stark reality...
I do think your title takes away some of the innocence of this piece though...
but it does feel more `heart` than `head`... go with the heart evey time!

[Deanarrlack]

I like the title, the poem itself is pretty good, but still maybe too straight forward and too common place.

[Wildfleour]

I can sense the depth of your emotions and despair.

[+xDrunkenFairytalex+]

Awe. :( Sad ending. But I loved it! I think... that I'm your biggest fan. What do u think? LoL.
Massive Kudos, Dahling! (btw.. I was saying that last part in an english acsent.) :]]
Peace, Love, and Butterflies
~Kalisa Rachelle

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

i know that feeling. i went through it a while ago. it sux. great poem, anyway.