Like a hopeless soul in hell

I wrote this after a fight with my Dad

You get in my face,

As you yell.

You make me feel,

Like a hopeless soul in hell.

 

As if it's not bad enough,

I didn't even see you for twelve years.

Still I get no love,

I just feel this pain & cry these tears.

 

I shouldn't even care,

Just like you don't.

I shouldn't even be there,

Just like you won't.

 

Still somehow I'm hurt,

By all of your insults,

You make me feel like dirt,

The way you speak of all my faults.

 

No matter what I say,

You'll never admit,

That deep down you you really hate me,

You love making me feel like s**t.

 

I gave up everything,

To be able to see you every day.

You'll never make this up,

No matter what you say.

These scars you've left on me,

Will never go away.

 

Every time I see your face,

I'll remember that yell,

I'll remember how you made me feel,

Like a hopeless soul in hell.

 

This all caught me off guard,

I'm falling apart.

I'll always be scarred,

Because you have no heart.

Author's Note

I wrote this after a fight with my Dad

Reviews

[Enigma]

Wow!! Now htis is wuite dark and very powerful.I can sense the feelings that you've expressed above. Everyone feels the same after a loveed one yells at them.You've framed it all in a very good pattern. It flows like a sad song.You pin-point what all thing hurt you and what do you plan to do in response.
"I shouldn't even care,

Just like you don't.

I shouldn't even be there,

Just like you won't."

[Lyndsay Castro]

Wow, ususally any parental issues are labeled "teenage angst". But this is a good piece and it shows your versatility.

[The realest]

Very real emotion in this poem because it always helps to write. content was very something i think alot of people can relate too good job

[+xDrunkenFairytalex+]

o.o WoW. *speachless* I want so bad to give awesome words but... "wow" is all I have" Kudos, chika! Very well done!

[Kelly]

This is beautiful!!!! I can really feel you. Bekah never stop writing!!!!

[kitty_kelley]

This was really good, I know what you're going through and I'm here for you.... Keep that in mind.

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

i know this all too well. i'm not going to talk about it, though. great poem reguardless. :D

[Wildfleour]

I'm sorry. I hope your relationship has healed since the writing of this.

Everyday --- every day

[undisguised]

Very nice writing.
Hang in there. Things do get better. say what you need to say.

[Reborn A Phoenix]

OMG i love this poem so much i know how u feel hun i wish he would just amid it