Falling Apart

Self explanitory

I'm falling apart,

in every way,

with nothing to say.

Nothing to do but look the other way,

Just laugh and say

that I'm okay.

 

Sometimes I smile when I really wanna cry.

Sometimes I keep holding on when I wanna say goodbye.

Sometimes I tell the truth when I really wanna lie.

 

Now I'm feeling like,there's nothing I can do.

I feel like everything said to me,

is really untrue.

All I really wanna do is start all over and feel brand new.

 

But I'll just sit here and wait for my train.

I'll cry it all out in the middle of the rain,

hoping I won't go insane.

Reviews

[Annebelle Ashire]

The Insanity of sanity....

Your last stanza,

" But I'll just sit here and wait for my train.
I'll cry it all out in the middle of the rain,
hoping I won't go insane. "


We all seem to be hoping ----
as we await our carriage away from the pain..
mixing tears with the rain, eventually salt is all you taste...

It seems Impecable that we should run from our very thoughts,
and yet, it is assumingly the best thing to do at times --- at least....that's what most will think..
Finding ourselves with a lack of speach as reality speaks for us...there's no fighting back when this battle can't be won.

This was a painful write - but I love the wording.
You are a true controdiction - but beauty shines through this.

- AC -

[Lyndsay Castro]

I truly love this. It is a wonderful work of art. You really let us know exactly how you're feeling without being overly dramatic.

[Brandon]

Definitely a good flow on this one. Well done.

I liked this. The flow was good. I liked what you said in the last stanza. I could feel the heartbreak! Very good poem.