All Alone

It's depressing but I find myself feeling this way ocasionaly.

 

Sometimes I really feel so cold but today you only made me feel colder.

No one is ever there when I look over my shoulder.

I thought all the things you told me were the way you felt.

The cards that I need are never what is dealt.

So now I sit here wondering why I'm not good enough.

All I really wanted was to be you're only love.

I'm all alone now,

Asking my self how,

Everyone I love leaves me.

I'm all alone now,

Asking my self how,

I'm never the one they want me to be.

I smile to try to hide my pain,

When in my head I'm going insane.

I'm all alone now,

Asking my self how,

There is now sun now.

It's all about the tears & the rain.

 

 

~Rebekah M. Darby~

Reviews

[Enigma]

True emotions beautifully expressed.Great write!!!
"It's all about the tears and the rain"

[Lyndsay Castro]

How do you do it? It's a lonely world. But even if they're not physically near you, the rest of us - and you know who "us" is - are here with you.

[Annebelle Ashire]

The anguish of having to deal with the cards that were never dealt...
The irony of tears and rain water...
And the self-questioning wonder that we long to rid of...but cannot live without..

- this write caught me off guard.
I'll be honest - it did.
I'm used to reading lengthy writes.
But when I finished reading it...I read it again....and then again...

"I smile to try to hide my pain,
When in my head I'm going insane"

I somehow throw myself into this accusation every day...
and each day it's a new load...

"It's all about the tears & the rain."
- how true this is -
and yet, how blasphemer - not in the sense of disrespect ...
but to those who falter with ease... some people take this context so literally .. that..."the tears & the rain" are all they have left.... and so they lose themselves in honest to God self-reassurance - that somehow drives them to insanity...
true,
I may have take this a bit far - but when it comes to poetry,
you should always let your mind wander and expand past the original meaning.

I'm rambling,
Great write - honest perspective.

~*AC*~

[Ronda]

I remember feeling this way.... You did a very good job of making a subject we all go through interesing and leaving the reader hanging on every word. This is simple, but you can feel the pain in each word. I like it!

[The Outlaws' Song]

It brought some personal memories back in my mind.
What i appreciated the most about this piece is that it is a heart-felt poem--sincere, simple!!!

Nicely done!!Keep up the good work!

[F. Nazarov]

Sometimes I really feel so cold but today you only made me feel colder.

I love how the feeling was expressed. sometimes I struggle to
express it, but you did an excellent job.
I've actually found myself feeling this way,
and you channeled your emotion successfully,
to write an excellent piece here.
I commend you on a great job well done.