Angel's Rain

I think rain is something we all share an interest in. Not only because of the petrichor but also because there's something unspeakably magical about it.

I thought I heard the moaning wind

From the quiet where I lay

I thought I heard the crying storm,

Alone that darkened day.

 

I thought as murderous clouds appeared

Too late to run away

And then as bristling howl began

I couldn’t help but stay.

 

If falling rain is angels’ tears

And snow the angels’ dreams

Then what could the unearthly storms

To heaven’s angels mean?

 

I thought I heard the tired wind

From where I sat alone

Perhaps the anger from above

Or something else unknown.

 

I thought as vibrant purple hues

Pushed the storm away

Why the glowing angel’s tears

Had bathed the world today.

 

If anger yields the darkest thoughts

And sorrow brings on pain

For what reason then did angels weep,

And call upon the rain?

Author's Note

So when I was in fourth grade, my teacher told me I couldn't rhyme worth beans and to stick with a more mathematical career in the future. Alright, so I'm aware that "Crater Lake" doesn't exactly rhyme with "climbing a gate" but I was eight for goodness sake! Is my rhyming really that bad? Are there any pointers you'd be willing to give on how to get the perfect rhyme? Yes? Yes?

Reviews

[devon]

You're rhyming is perfectly peachy, my dear! You have nothing to worry about! You are very talented, and I advise you to please choose a career in the literary department. :)

I absolutely LOVED THIS. The idea of angels' tears coming from the heavens is so whimsical. My favorite lines would have to be, "If falling rain is angels’ tears/
And snow the angels’ dreams." It's GORGEOUS.

Beautiful writing, sweetie pie!

[Becca Bishop]

Thank you!!! Peachy perfect :P I'm going to have to use that. I'm so surprised that no one else's heard about rain being angel's tears :P I thought that's what everyone....well...yeah. Maybe I'm a weirdo. Oh well. Thank you for your wonderful review :D :D :D :D :D :D :D

[devon]

You're very welcome!! Hahaha, you seem like such a happy, enthusiastic person! :) It puts a smile on my face, lol.

[marie]

rhyming isn't always about cat hat sometimes its an implied rhyme that when spoken no one would know the difference its more a about the rhythm and tone o it any way you don't have to rhyme for it to be a great poem :)

[Becca Bishop]

Good point!!! Thanks for reading :D :D :D

[Alexa Tasch]

Your rhyming is fine! And math is stupid!! I loved this. I think thunderstorms are magical and this poem was so descriptive too! I love how you compaired rain to angel's tears! This was beautiful :)

[Becca Bishop]

Thank you! You're absolutely right - math is dumb. It's at the top of the list of things I'd love to blow up with a nuclear missile...you know, if it was tangible and if I was allowed to touch nuclear weapons. Maybe next year :P
Thanks for reading!!!

[Alexa Tasch]

You're welcome! And that sounds like an excellent plan!

[PP]

I can sing this piece like a song, go girl!! You are doing ace with your rhyming scheme:)

[Becca Bishop]

Thanks so much!! :P :D :D :D

[Tomi]

I so much love this..It's brilliant! the rhyming is perfect! well done

[Becca Bishop]

Thanks!!!! :D :D :D

[C.E.Grey]

It's great. I love the rain and miss it desperately. Thank you :)

[Becca Bishop]

Thank you even more for the review :P :D

[M.M.I]

I thought the rhyming went smoothly..the sentiment is there and it is done well enough. I wouldn't worry about what your 4th grade teacher said, she sounds kind of vain :)

[Becca Bishop]

Thanks for the kind words and great review :D :D :D

[Sid]

I love this poem, its really beautiful and the imagery is vivid and well your rhyming is perfect...I don't understand what your teacher had to complain about...amazing write!!!

[Becca Bishop]

Thank you!!! I guess I'm making her sound worse than she really was, though. I mean, I was eight after all. Probably not the best writer in the world :P

Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!! :D :D :D :D

[DrD]

Becca, twenty lashes for your teacher. Your sense of meter and rhyme are at a level many would like to reach. I am stunned at your ability and cannot believe you are as young as you portray.

[Becca Bishop]

Thank you!!! I'm glad I'm not as bad I was led to believe. That's a relief :D Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review, it means so much to me :)

[P.S.Chance]

I always thought storms - especially thunder storms - were kinda scary. It always felt like anger from above to me, too. I like the reference to 'glowing angel's tears'.

[Becca Bishop]

Thanks for your review!! I was always told that being scared of thunder storms was an irrational fear but I never really bought that. Glad I'm not alone!! Thank you for reading!!!!

[P.S.Chance]

you are very welcome! thank you for sharing on here. It's always an honor to read other people's writing - it's always a plus when it's good, too! :)