Let's Pretend

So let's pretend for a few moments that this poem doesn't have too many of these "-" and these ",". Let's pretend that I actually know what I'm talking about when we all know I don't. That'll be nice.

Let’s pretend -

For one second, one moment -

Let’s pretend that something

Something called love

Really exists.

Alright.

Fine with me.

I’ve got nothing better to do.

Let’s pretend that florid hues really do appear -

Like sun-kissed blossoms -

In the cheeks of a girl.

And let’s pretend that the solemn whispers,

Proclamations, cries

Of I love you aren’t all really false.

We might even be able to believe -

If we were so inclined -

To pretend that this thing called love

Isn’t a figment of imagination.

Confusion.

Loneliness.

We could pretend that love doesn’t fade.

Those feelings stay the same.

Although we all know

That

They

Don’t.

 

So let’s pretend.

For a second. A moment. A minute.

A lifetime.

That I’ve found you.

And you’ve found me.

And whatever lies beyond that is something

We don’t need to worry about.

Let’s pretend that for once

This thing they call love

Isn’t as complicated as they say it is.

Let’s pretend that it’s pure.

Golden.

True.

Maybe when we stop pretending,

And go our separate ways

You’ll still see the florid hues of my smile

In the early morning sky.

Just as I will hear your voice whenever the rain

Tears at my window.

And maybe -

Just maybe -

When, if ever, we meet again

This time we won’t have to pretend

This time it won’t be pretend.

Reviews

[Balkaran Sidhu]

it was like proving something using the method of contradiction :p :p :D

[Becca Bishop]

Well...I am a very contradicting person...I guess that's gotta come out somewhere :P

[chandlerl]

Beautiful writing really, it was very well written.
now bring me a poptart.

[Becca Bishop]

:D Why thank you. I've got one thing to say:
GET YOUR OWN FREAKING POP TART!!!! AND WHERE THE HECK IS MY CHOCOLATE FOUNTAIN??? HMM???? HMM???!!!
Ok, I know that was two things, but we all know how bad I am at counting :P

[JRC Talberg]

Awwwww. Just awwwwww. Fabulous write. 150/100

[Becca Bishop]

Awwwwwww :P Thank you!!! Did you know 4/3's of the world's population has trouble with fractions? In your case though I'm willing to excuse it :P And you get a cookie too!!! How special are you?? :D

[Frieda P]

LOL ;)

[Frieda P]

I want a cookie :(

[Becca Bishop]

If I had some way to give you one without seeming like a freakishly creepy stalker you bet I would!!!! COOKIES FOR THE WORLD!!!

[Frieda P]

merci beaucoup :)

[Becca Bishop]

Um....lemme guess....that's French for "Becca, you go ahead and have my cookie because you're freaking awesome!!!"

[Frieda P]

How did you guess cookie monster?!

[Becca Bishop]

I guess I'm just super smartical like that :D :D :D :D

[Frieda P]

haha 'smartical' I'm stealing that :P

[Becca Bishop]

:D STEALING'S BAD!!!!! :P That's ok. I stole it from my little sister. The funny thing is, when you say that your smartical it actually sounds like you're dumbical. I mean dumb :P

[Frieda P]

I hope your little sister doesn't read that ;)

[Becca Bishop]

Good thing she's not into writing :D :D Phew!!

[Frieda P]

hahaha, you giving out cookies tonight too? ;)

[Becca Bishop]

Sadly no :( But I am making a gigantic Candyland themed cake tomorrow for my orchestra's silent auction :D :D :D It's gonna be the bomb!!! Or whatever those hip young old folks say these days :P

[Frieda P]

Was that a dig at me?! Watch that smarty pants :P

[Becca Bishop]

:D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D

[Mauricio Montoya]

Nice work.

[Becca Bishop]

Thanks :D

[Frieda P]

OMG this is precious. I love the concept and your style. Let's pretend I believe in love...haa good read.

[Becca Bishop]

Thank you :P

[PP]

Wow Becca I am lost for words in your praise! Ab-so-bloody-lutely love your style and the concept!

[Becca Bishop]

Thanks ;D :D :D :D :D

[Becca Bishop]

Thanks!!! :D :D :D

[Damien Davison]

Loved the "Let's Pretend" idea, the writing style was perfect for it. It made it serious and deep. I enjoyed this one, great job!

[Becca Bishop]

Thank you!!!! :D :D

[Cryingkate]

Actually read this,
It wasn't painful to do so either.
In fact I enjoyed it.
Found that it wasn't another poem I had to struggle to comprehend
I didn't have to re interpret it.
It wasn't a flowery poem that stunk with two many perfumed words but nothing ,was said of any value, nor was it a repetitious subject. Like a movie from the same producer stuck in some mode like a scratchy record.
All because of these things I want to read more of your work.
I think that perhaps I might really enjoy spending my time reading great poetry with messages from the heart and minds eye that is packaged in a nice easily poetic form :-) Bravo you got my attention.

[Becca Bishop]

Thank you so much :D :D :D I'm glad it didn't burn your eyes out or cause you to contract some incurable disease. If any poems could do that, it'd be mine :P Good thing my simplistic nature shoves through into my poetry, right? Right ;P
Thanks for wanting to read more :D Don't feel obligated, though. They all stink to some extent...but thank you anyway!!! :) :)

[C.E.Grey]

Absolutely beautiful. I love the tone and word choice. You put it together very well

[Becca Bishop]

Thank you!!! :) :) :) :)

[Sid]

Nice write this, Let's pretend "You suck at writing!".......sorry that's freakin' impossible. This is great Becca the way you have described love in a unique, uplifting way, I just feel maybe it does exist...again a great write, rally liked this one!!

[Becca Bishop]

Thanks, Sid (that's what I'm calling you from now on since I'm way to lazy to type sid_yadav over and over...that underscore is a killer for me). I hope love does exist like this....it'd be a bummer if it didn't. I'm glad you liked it :D Thank you again for the read and review :) :)