MY PRETTY HAIR

A tribute to people who suffer from cancer

Combing my pretty hair
Feeling something akin to fear
Afraid of a harsh touch
My hair is beautiful as such

Long tresses shines in light
Like stars in winter nights
Smooth as silk,soft as a feather
But now it has started to wither

Run my comb gently down
Watching the mirror with a frown
Chunks of hair falling down
For reasons well beknown

"Chemo causes hair loss"
I remember the doctor say
"Don't worry,it will be okay"
I hear with a heart which froze

Feel the tears flowing down
I loved the hair I owned
I can't see it losing like this
Better be get it done with

Now I sit still staring at the floor
Where heaps of hair has been thrown
I rise my head and smile at me
I see a bald girl smiling back.

Dont give up,just fight hard
Its just hair,it will grow back
As of now my reflection is bald
But there will be a day,I believe
With long hair,I will live.

Author's Note

This one just...happened..Feel free to drop what you feel.

Reviews

[Mirra]

I like how it started and love how it ended. Truly inspiring!

[Chris Micha]

Such beautiful and heartfelt work you have done here. Knowing this first hand with people in my life, it hit home and you did an amazing job, Sky.

[C. Rose]

Well described. I liked the hopeful end. I'm glad I read this - although now I think I'll find something light hearted as a pick me up.

Watch out,your commas don't have spaces after them - just like I did at the beginning of this sentence.
"Better be get it done with" - typo?
"heaps of my hair has been thrown" - have?
"Dont give up" - don't

The first three stanzas have some rhymes and almost rhymes, but then that pattern drops out of the poem. Either have a rhyme pattern or don't rhyme (especially in the beginning) otherwise the reader will think you messed up the pattern.

Thank you for such a meaningful poem.

-Courtesy of the Constructive Critics-

[Hope]

It's inspirational and for me your best say side by side with "An outrageous cry " ;) Keep it up ! Very well written ! Hats off ! :)

[Sky]

Thank you sis?This is my best say?lol.I don't know.But glad you found it inspiring :-)

[Hope]

Most welcome !

[Rose Diamond]

This was a very inspiring poem, and I really hope people who need these words will one day read it!

[Sky]

Thank you :-)

[Saddam]

Dont give up,just fight hard
Its just hair,it will grow back
As of now my reflection is bald
But there will be a day,I believe
With long hair,I will live.

This words are so useful for who is in that desert. Our Cricket World cup hero was inspired with it. Great one dear.

[Sky]

Thank you. :-)

[Perdition]

And yet you doubted whether you could ever write another "Just Happened Rhymer"...This is a remarkable poem and tribute Sky. One that touches the beauty of living in fear of losing what cancer takes away from a healthy body;From an unsuspecting fear.
In the end it becomes our passion for life that struggles our goals beyond our senses of loss. In a wonderful way we find a deeper beauty that cures our momentary shock...We grow deep with appreciation for what the loss of hair(cats excluded..lol.) can never take away. Beauty belongs to the soul and It becomes a cancer of our freedom from our fears and a bearing of our souls hidden under locks of gold. Something in the way of a second chance and gives us the courage to become more than a passage of truth. We become bald, naked and free. Thanks once more~

[Sky]

Thanks a lot.You never fail to drop down a very inspiring review.You have no idea how encouraging your reviews are. :-)

[Luna Zerimar]

This was beautiful. Cancer can be hard, and people need motivation these days

I hope they never give up.

Good read.

[Sky]

Thank you.I hope so too :-)

[Honey-Bee]

Nice work describing someone losing their hair to chemo! Emotional and descriptive work too! Lovely!

[Sky]

Thank you honey.I'm glad you loked it. :-)