FAKE

Just something I scibbled

I was on my own
In a world so lone
You crashed into me
Making things go wrong
First I thought it was right
You gave me smiles
You made me laugh
But you were fake
Every joke was fake
Every smile was fake
What was not fake
Was my love for you
But you didn't see
You didn't know
What it felt like
To be real for once
And then you left
Taking the fake world
And I was left
Without a world
Because somewhere in between
I started believing the facade
And I lost my reality
As it entwined with yours
When you took your farce
You took my reality
Without a world I'm left alone
In a desert where I dont know
Whether it is fake or real.

Author's Note

Well.I'm not sure about this one..So..Leave your honest opinion. :-)

Reviews

[Missiannelli]

Fake keeps on flowing, as we keep on believing. Been through this situation MANY times, let's not lose faith, and I hope all is well! Much Love :)

[LoveDens]

Honest emotions come so real

[Folagbade Muyiwa]

This is awesome and I get along with every line

[Patricia]

OUCH! I know that feeling. so sorry you had to feel that way. But great poetry. Hits the heart. Keep writing. :) You express very well.

[C. Rose]

in a desert where I dont know, should be don't
"In a world so lone" - alone?

I like this. Great flow, great concept. Smooth transition.
Be sure about this one. :)

[Jenn]

I like the repetition of the word "fake". Its such a harsh, almost hateful word, it really spits fire in this poem. Nice!

[Sky]

Thank you. :-)

[Endeavor]

The line 'When you took your farce, you took my reality...' is very striking to me. It implies deep impressions when I think about it. Reality is something that you are still aware of even when masked with pretension. But still, it was taken away from the writer. This is a cool piece! Thank you for sharing it to us!

[Sky]

Thank you.Glad you enjoyed it. :-)

[Norma Padro]

Hello. It was nice. I think poems are very emotional. Sometimes they can leave an impact or explain a disaster. I liked it, because sometimes love is not what it's suppose to be. Not many people feel it. Others take it for granted. Love is a true feeling. This was very nice.

[Sky]

Thank you for liking it Norma :-)

[Emily]

I was hooked at the first line! Good Job Sky!

[Sky]

Thanks Emily.I'm glad you liked it. :-)

[Hope]

Wow ! this one's really very well written ! It's like almost or say just everyone has experienced this feeling sometimes or other ! It is very nice ! Seriously..you rocked this one ! :D

[Sky]

Thank you sis..Like I said..I was very nervous abt this one. Glad you liked it. :-D

[Hope]

All in your work ! I just wrote what I thought :D