Struggle

What is it like to feel deep, dark, and confused? Where do you go? do you go to the darkness or to the light

As Ann looks at her world, she sees darkness with little light.  Her fears pick up speed as she moves forward in life and it scares her to see what she sees.  She has been in therapy and some things have come to light. As she closes her eyes she imagines herself looking over a big mountain that she has climbed over the years to see what her life looks like now that she knows the truth.  Her vision to the left side of the horizon sees darkness more than light and light more than happiness.  Lies fill the sky that either she has put there or others have told her.  Fakery is at its finest so no one can see her pain. She now sees things changing. Changing toward solitude and isolation.  Her world in this horizon is a cloud of misfortune, unrest and confusion.  Ann shivers as she sees opportunity shattered by fear, loneliness defeating peace and isolation conquering the world.

 

When she looks to the right of the horizon, she visions a world of possibilities with Christ at the forefront. She has the opportunity to show her love and devotion though sacrifice and submission.  There is peacefulness conquering the darkness and a light that shines like it was the only bulb in the world.  Meaning is here, life is here, moments are here and opportunities are relentless.  There is no loneliness, there are no questions, and there is no sadness.

 

Who will win this war? Which horizon will dominate? Which one will be the hill that she chooses? What hill will be chosen for her?  Where is Ann’s Amor? Where is her fight? Where is her resilience?

 

Lonely, desperate, and isolated, vs. chosen, opportunity and peace.  Who will win?

 

GOD KNOWS, BUT YOU HAVE TO FIGHT THE FIGHT.

Author's Note

I am new to this and this is my first journal. Please review and let me know thoughts, suggestions, grammar issues, and comments.

Reviews

[CecilA]

I suggest you 'show' us Ann and her world; the who, what, when, where, why and how of your story so that we can 'see' her and her world.

You have a theme and an outline for this chapter, now you can flesh it out by giving us a vision of Ann and her destiny. Dialog would be helpful as well. Write you story in the past tense and your dialog in the present tense.

When you tell us Ann sees darkness with little light it's confusing. Perhaps you can begin your story with Ann at home, in an apartment, out of doors, or some other place that you can describe before showing us her situation. Is he in a room you can describe? Is she dressed in PJ's, work clothes, or lounge wear? Let us see her face, her age, her hair, and sense her emotions. What is she afraid of? Or is she angry?

Read your story aloud. What do you see, hear, smell, taste, feel, or sense? Share those with us. What is important about her situation; why should we care about.

You ask a lot of interesting questions which we cannot answer because you haven't shown us enough to form an opinion yet.

Can Ann talk with someone about her situation? A sibling, a parent, a friend? Can she text this information or e-mail it to someone?

Sometimes it helps to write an outline using verbs and nouns in poetic form. Other times, I write dialog and then flesh out the story with pertinent data. You'll discover you'r own method.

I hope this helps. I'd like to see what you develop.

Thanks for sharing your story. You have a good start.

Sincerely,

Cecil A