Scarlet Paints the Flower Bed

Many thanks to my dear friend and brilliant poet, Rick Peutter, whose suggestions were so very welcome!! This poem is written in Trochaic Trimeter with Catalexis (see Author's note.)

Trochaic Trimeter with Catalexis.

 

Trochaic Trimeter with Catalexis.

Empty rests the moist dark earth,

which shall spring forth hallowed birth.

Rose of such perfection, true,

how we long to view your hue.

 

First is seen the sprout so shy,

life still meek, leaves seek the sky.

Hiding self so tightly closed,

bud thus formed, a baby rose.

 

Next ‘tis waft of sweet perfume,

sun-coaxed flower, fragrant bloom.

Oh, now blossom, opens wide,

petal after petal rise.

 

Maiden joins the vast display,

flora hath so much to say.

Reddest red t’was what it said,

scarlet paints the flower bed.

 

Then alas comes withering,

rose ‘tis now done dithering.

Though one begs its heart to beat,

‘tis a sorrowed death, once sweet.

 

Gone to ground, returns the bloom,

back to mother earth, so soon.

Again, wait we, bud to rise

rose of glory, in our eyes.

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For those of you interested in poetic meter:

Trochaic Trimeter with Catalexis.

Author's Note

Structure: Trochaic Trimeter with Catalexis.

Awards:

- What About White Contest - "My Special Favorite" 8th Place

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

Dearest Barbara..........oh, I see your first place win posted for this poem and I know you have not been on site for so many, many months!
You are missed, and thought of so very often!! I wish we could hear from you sweet friend!!!

Sheila

[BLBrown]

Thanks so much for your kind comments about my poem. Yes, I'm not on the site much anymore, preferring All Poetry which is much more active. Thank you again dear friend. It was lovely to hear from you.

[Sheila Kline]

Oh, it is wonderful to hear from you!!!! I shall have to check out the site you mention, though I do enjoy Writer's Cafe. Please do stay in touch!!!!

[LuciaMarie]

This an absolutely beautiful piece, and it reminds me of the subtle beauties of nature an how it inspires me.

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Very cool, I really enjoyed some arcaic stuff like using "th" to mark the singular 3rd person or the use of " 'tis " and "t'was". Also, talking about the theme, thank you, thank you for the most vivid image I've had so far reading a poem in WC ! You caught every detail of the flower, it was delightful to read it !

[BLBrown]

Thanks so much...glad you enjoyed it!

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Isn't nature sooo inspiring?! I absolutely loved this :)

[RachelReaper]

beautiful job! The subject, the wording, everything! :)

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

A very beautiful piece of poetry.

[Emerald Seas]

Well executed, Barbara!

Thank you for your note, since I have RRs off. I am always up to reading your work. Yes, I do love to write about nature and I'm glad you pointed me to this poem. Such an exquisite writing, the life cycle of a rose has never been captured so beautifully.

I tell myself one day I will devote more time to develop my poetic skill set, especially toward metered poetry. You know my schedule is crazy now - and I find writing anything to be a chore at the moment. When my life calms down, I will give metered verse a go around, several times until I can say I can do it without stress or "work". So eventually it comes more naturally for me. I enjoy free verse, but it is also a lazier way of writing (IMHO). If I can one day, get metered poetry down to a regular and profound effort - then I may actually feel like a poet!

Excellent! 100

[BLBrown]

You know what was so unexpected for me about the meter exercise, which I have now applied to other existing poems? The flow and sound is better. I guess that is the ultimate purpose of structure, to make a better poem. Now that I've done several, I'm actually able to move through them fairly quickly which is nice because I'm forever tweaking anyway.

Glad you're well and thanks for such a kind review!

[R.A. Youngblood]

I like your playing with words like " 'tis" or "t'was" even if it's little confusing, but all in all it's exquisite! I like your idea to wrote something different, something like this.
The positive rays are hitting on it, it made me smile!
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up my wonderful friend :D

[BLBrown]

Many thanks! T'was fun to write! ;)

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah, i can see that, t'was fun to read! You're welcome! :D

[BLBrown]

Sometimes, the use (not overuse) of words like 'tis, twas, doth, hence, hath, and so on can make a piece sound a bit more lyrical. Sandbox! Fun to play in!

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah, that's why it was fun to read. :D

[marytownsend]

I enjoyed this very much, beautifully done!

[Leigh]

This is written with classical style, I really like it, thanks....to you both