Torn in two

a poem about being in love with one person but falling for another.

To you;

 

The days drag on saddening myself

I love you but he's still on my mind

I feel guilt and pain when i see his face

Leaving you was all I could do, leaving him I had no choice

True love is what i want, It's what i will chase

The things we say aren't always true.

 I've lied again to the both of you

 

To him;

 

I love him

I like you

I know that you've been hurt too

I remember when you said you loved me

I was so blind it was hard to see

What i had was loving it was great, its all over now

The only feeling you have for me is hurt and hate.

Reviews

[Katelin]

Simple, but effective. Nice job =]

[Brandi.]

hehehe i know who these people are.. OGRE

[deeps]

I like the set up of this write, This is full of emotion very well expressed.

[Rodrick Franklin McLare..]

Poets Reply

An we... those left, to chosen. Frozen, from shades to fade.
Bleed the seed, of your need... to, choose them.
Glimmers found, in loves surround. That, moves you.
One to another's, losing. To your choosing. The find.
In kind.
leave a heart, behind... for, that other.
Love, like twins... in parallels haste, smothers
One lover!

As I too, or as well. Am, Northern Lights. I do like and appreciate, your framing.
It does reflect Imagination for the staging. The continuity of flow in poetry, is its effervescence. Where it sparkle, an tease and begs release. Like your framing gives the reader, the intended flow. Where does it go... you see, the rhythm of rhyme. The punctuation, makes it sublime. Punches through your meaning.

Don't get me wrong, your feel an meaning do come across. This, an explanation one to the other. Your making that very evident. What your lovers, want to feel. Is your torment, the difficulties in your heart. In this choosing. To leave them, with some guessing mystery... that keeps, them. Forever, in love with you! Regardless, of choice. If you relate, and understand this review. It holds three I think, very pertinent clues. To deep poetry. I score you a 75, because your form is newly refreshing. I believe if you dig deep, the words arrive. That make you, thrive. To desire to write more... poetry. Very good you! Perception... Ro.