My Master my King

Some thoughts, open to your interpretation

My Master my King

Before whom I kneel

For whom these fields I sow

I follow you blindly

For when they ask

“What is the matter?”

Say, blindness has set me free

 

My Master my King

For whom these fields I sow

I question sometimes

If blind, how can I know?

I can wander in pastures

But with what aim

When your words don’t show?

 

My Master my King

My thoughts they ache

Before whom I kneel

I think for peace's sake

If my hearts forever bowing

In craze for you

When will I feel?

 

Forgive me for I attain

The right to question

Though my love for you

Isn’t fickle

I wonder if these wishes

One day cause me to burn

With you, I only wish to reason

 

I wish to gaze at the stars

And seek where you are

How you started this

And how you calculated

This majestic mist

How you designed it all

So simply in a twist

 

Fear not

For you will be

My Master my King

But pardon me,

For I do seek answers
To some questions

Worth asking

Reviews

[Rogue]

I really like the structure and wording here. I perceived this more as a spiritual piece than an errant knight serving nobility. We can only follow blindly and unquestioningly when there is complete trust. Given the state of our world these days, that is a rare thing to acquire.

Extremely thought provoking and well penned. :)

[Pollai]

It's open to perception but it is a personal piece. Thank you :)

[Idealistic Annie]

This is a beautiful piece, love the flow! Liked how you emphasized the central focus with the use of repetition with the title throughout the poem.

[zainul]

This looks like a prayer.
Releasing one's emotion to expect no instant response but an instantly relieved heart.
As most prayers are like poems or songs,I enjoyed its rhythm and natural flow.
Wonderful write.

[Baby Ricochet]

A poem for whatever's on the psychic alter. Like we all worship different things. It could be Jesus or money or sex or crack or whatever. It's your master and King and you are it's servant. Nice write Pollai

[Ees]

Right off the bat, I almost thought about not reading this. I don't tend to like reading poems with a religious slant. They make me nervous for some reason. I am Catholic, but not extensively so. I just thought you should know that before I said anything else.

The language that you use seems odd to me. I feel like a relationship with god would be better if it weren't hampered down formal words. Or maybe it is just too expected in a holy piece of poetry to come across words like "thee". People don't use "thee" or phrase things quite as you did these days except when speaking of God. So maybe it was just that it wasn't surprise. It's what I expected to see.

The questioning is always part of it. Believing wouldn't prove anything without a bit of human questioning.

I don't know. That's all I got as far as my impressions of this work.

[Pollai]

Thanks Ees, I do appreciate your honesty with this. I know it's a bit more black and white in terms of people liking this topic but thank you for still reading. I'm not overly religious but I would say I have faith. The language is formal, I guess because my relationship with him is such as well. I really like the straight forwardness of your feedback.

[Ees]

I always try to be straightforward while reviewing. The reviews don't do anybody any good if we aren't honest with each other in my opinion.

I never thought that a relationship with God should be so formal. It always seemed to me that he might rather enjoy just a regular old chat now and again, what with so many people always asking for things. He might need a few regular friends down here among his creations.

[Pollai]

I do think it can become much more friendly over time, asking questions leads into breaking that barrier of formality.

[Just Kim]

I really deeply enjoyed this write. It's real and honest and out there.
Love this write. Wonderful job!

[Pollai]

Thank you, glad you enjoyed it :)

[Harrisen Viator]

I like how you use the title throughout the poem, it makes it real as if it is true dialogue speaking to the most high. It gives a lot good questions that must be asked, but don't always have answers. I really enjoy this poem. Good job!

[Pollai]

Thank you Harrisen :)

[Redboy]

awesome!!!!!!!

[Wórdsmíth]

My Master my King
My thoughts they ache
Before whom I kneel
I think once for peace's sake
If my hearts forever bowing
In craze for you
When will I feel.......?
well, it's a nice write, liked this one, moreover liked this above stanza.
nice flow on ink man.

[Pollai]

Thank you :)