Stuck

I'm lost.
No simple way to put it.
I want to go somewhere
with my life.
But I'm lost.
Without you,
I'm lost.
Because of you,
I'm lost.
But because of me,
I'm stuck.
I didn't stop you.
I didn't stop them.
I just listened.
Obeyed.
Lied to myself.
Because of this,
I'm stuck.

Author's Note

Just a way to sum up my life right now.

Reviews

[GTVile]

Very much to the point. No need for elaboration with this kind of literary assertiveness. Perhaps the best part of it, though, is how you make sure you own up for the things that you may have done to put yourself in the current situation, instead of just casting the shadow of blame on everyone else but yourself.

"But because of me,
I'm stuck."

This is candid and honest and suggests that you have a firm grip on reality and the circumstances. If nothing else, you've certainly got the first foot forward to getting out the situation. Very good.

[...]

... it's a really tough place to be in ... and these powerful lines of your poem give an insight into how and why the situation is what it is ...

I didn't stop you.
I didn't stop them.
I just listened.
Obeyed.
Lied to myself.
Because of this,
I'm stuck.

... i battle with this almost every day ... and it's very tough ... requires a phenomenal bit of courage and resilience ... it took me a long time to comprehend that my parents ultimately want me to be happy and are as lost as i am when their recommendations don't work ... ultimately we reached a point of peaceful equilibrium when we agreed to disagree about certain things ... one needs a lot of patience ... i think the first step is to be aware that one is "stuck" ... and the next step is expressing oneself ... your poem is especially powerful because it is guiding you ... it's your inner voice ...

[clauds294]

Ive felt like this before. But i know you will be able to get out of that rut you're in.

[Jenna]

Very well written. I enjoyed it, kinda reminded me of one of mine, but I think I like yours better. ;)

[Jade (insanity)]

I really liked it. It flowed, even without rhyme. And it was short and to the point. And though we may be in different points of view, I can totally relate.
Great job!
Jade

[Vartul]

Hmmm.Different.Well, you remind me of the song "I'm with you" by Avril lavigne.
I like this.

[Ruth]

Honest, courageous and actually really powerful due to your use of structure!
xx

[Rawr!!XD]

This is a good way to say that you let too many people influence you're decisions in life. Stay strong and keep writing. It's ok to say no to people every now and then.

[The Analog Kid]

Good way to get out the feelings. Nice honest and clear write.

[carmz]

its a life 's reality...........

nice one...........

keep it up