Stuck

Stuck

A Poem by Victoria

I'm lost.
No simple way to put it.
I want to go somewhere
with my life.
But I'm lost.
Without you,
I'm lost.
Because of you,
I'm lost.
But because of me,
I'm stuck.
I didn't stop you.
I didn't stop them.
I just listened.
Obeyed.
Lied to myself.
Because of this,
I'm stuck.

© 2010 Victoria


Author's Note

Victoria
Just a way to sum up my life right now.

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Very much to the point. No need for elaboration with this kind of literary assertiveness. Perhaps the best part of it, though, is how you make sure you own up for the things that you may have done to put yourself in the current situation, instead of just casting the shadow of blame on everyone else but yourself.

"But because of me,
I'm stuck."

This is candid and honest and suggests that you have a firm grip on reality and the circumstances. If nothing else, you've certainly got the first foot forward to getting out the situation. Very good.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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"Stuck" is definitely not a compromising position
in any way shape or form.
Feeling the melancholy in your words....

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is straight to the point. I believe that every one somewhere in their lives have felt like this. some times it can be very hard for us to find ourselves, but whatch out when we do, we come out stronger than ever. good write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very much to the point. No need for elaboration with this kind of literary assertiveness. Perhaps the best part of it, though, is how you make sure you own up for the things that you may have done to put yourself in the current situation, instead of just casting the shadow of blame on everyone else but yourself.

"But because of me,
I'm stuck."

This is candid and honest and suggests that you have a firm grip on reality and the circumstances. If nothing else, you've certainly got the first foot forward to getting out the situation. Very good.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very honest piece, which makes it a very strong piece!
nice work with this!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow very straight forward. I was at this point at my time somewhere in my life. Soon you will find a way out and you won't feel stuck anymore. I loved this piece! Plus the fact it's how you feel right now. Great work! Cannot read some more!
J :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aww... I felt like this before... but you can't exactly jusy stay put. Even if it seems like the world itself is lost, it's not going to wait for you. Pick up your feet, carry on.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very in the "confessional" vein, and def relate-able. The "you" and "them" is very obscure - I'm not sure who they are, and it gives it a bit more ominous tone. "I just listened and obeyed" also makes the speaker complicit, so it's not simply a "woe is me" piece. As the saying goes, "fool me once, shame on you, fool me twice, shame on me".

Posted 14 Years Ago


so simple...and yet most would agree that this is a perfect description of what its like...wonderful

Posted 14 Years Ago


Yes, many of us can identify with this write. Sadly, we somehow get stuck, due to our mistakes, or maybe due to others', or sometimes because of no one's! Your poem runs deeper than just a portrayal of being stuck, though. I love your use of subtlety, specially in the lines Serah has quoted. Moving poem. Very very well written! I hope you break free soon!

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Victoria
Victoria

Malibu, CA



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My name is Victoria. I live large and dream even larger. My life consists of modeling in my free time and traveling the world but when I'm feeling down and out of control, I write. Writing inspires me.. more..

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